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Hey Owen, I think you don’t even need a real time face to face chat for what I mean, you can also post stuff below or talk in pms about it. Same as we do below our own stuff we could go ahead and analyze songs of artists we like, or songs in a style…
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We do it by growing through feedback and working together on songs. Through ideas and exchange of thoughts. Not by: your lyrics are fine but I can write them better than you…or by discussing if we should use AI or not. To me sometimes the small thin…
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Hey Sid,
I like this one, specially the chorus. It gives a real country feeling. The bridge was very surprising at first but I think a „lil drama“ like this makes a good country song. 😅
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Tyvm sid
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Ty Owen
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Well why not?
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Ty for your time Sid. Like I said it’s a very old one and I guess I used it as a technical task to get better.
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Merci Chris!
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Ty Owen!
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Ty pry !
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Tyvm Sid!
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Yep! Very good! I like the rock vibe u put it into!
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I just read this one and it’s very good! I especially like those parts inbetween:
There's a coldness, in your touch
Your thoughts, are a million miles away…
Gives a very harsh feeling.
The other line I do love is:
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I do like this one! Very meaningful and a strong feeling connected.
One little thing…possibly just me…but you play with colours here and you started right away with pink and purple, I’d have come up with a little colour in the first lines of … -
DO YOU REMEMBER ME ?
I've been the last summer wind. A‘
While you saw the autumn's stars
I've been the last loud laughter
Before tears rolled down your cheek
I am that whats left behind
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Thanks you two! Specially for pointing out some of the shit stuff my cell did on its own lol. Forgive me but as you know, it has to deal with 3 different language. I’ll change that.
About the last line: I know what you mean but I wanted that … -
It feels more smooth when you read it, don’t it?
I like the „blood-inc“ line!
One little thing:
A wild tapestry, where threads align > skip the „A“ -
Thanks pry and Sid! This one really means a lot to me. You know when you have written many pieces but only a few are always with you? This is one of those pieces!
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Thanks Owen, perfect explanation!
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You can use long lines or broken rhymes or all that, if you want to highlight something you want to say. Those little things are style methods that can „used carefully“ help to underline the message of your song, but first you should practice to bri…
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Thanks mora and matador! I really appreciate it!
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Hey there! While reading I was a bit unsure about two sax soli. After listening I think it’s fine if you call it bridges or connectors, a solo means more to me than it is in the song.
One small thing I would change:
after her touch,-&g… -
Hey, glad I could help!
I guess you missed something here: Searching for words guide me home…
And:
The song grew to heavenly height —> MY song…
It feels more smooth while reading, just don’t change to many images fr… -
Uh…oh… mhhh… I like the way you use your pen to write down good stuff like this. 😅
I like the image and the style I’ve chosen to put your words together. It definitely got style and shows a mighty little poet inside. Keep him alive!!
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Thank you Owen and the others for your encouraging words! I really thought: ok…that’s it! But this one „flew“ together almost as if there were no barriers in my brain and soul. I liked the feeling. And I just put those lines together without fear an…
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Thank you guys! I really appreciate your fb!
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Well it’s something that helps with the naming of things and bodyparts and so on, that’s always helpful for kids if it’s put in a metric frame. One thing I don’t get… was zum Henker soll das mit den Hosen und dem Loch? Das kapier ich grad nicht 😅
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Hey,
This gives one horror of an image but I like the way it’s told and its honesty!
One thing I find a bit difficult is the verse:
Morphine’s the only god they know
Who can take their pain away.
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Thanks Owen!
Now that I read your comment, I understand what you mean. I’ll think it over. Infact this is the first I’ve written in a year and I was surprised that it all still came out that „well“. But if you are to busy with yourself, own s… -
Hey Owen,
Now this is a real good one! I like the images you used and the tone.
I also like the way you put the words together. There is not a word to much, no bla bla the listener might get lost in, it’s sharp but still emotional (lack…
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