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Fb is feedback und nope I have never heared of Virgin olive oil… o,0
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Thanks for the comments and fb guys. As I said in my introduction (ok guess it was in the old forum) I deal with depression, anxiety and all that good stuff and I’m fighting my way through it. This pice here is really me trying to to talk about one …
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Hey Iron, thanks for your time and fb! Sometimes I do write the music too…well at least the chords to my words but only if I have the time and a clear vision for the whole song. I usually write the lyrics with some music in my mind but only if it’s …
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I thank you for your time, fb and ideas gentlemen.
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Heya, I do like it, specially the chorus and the verses get stronger while the song continues. I like that as well. Makes the whole thing more visual. Yeahaaa! 😜
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Thank you B! I really appreciate your fb and yes I let the listener decide
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It’s a good one, and you really did a great job with the surprising twist! I do like that. And I’ve learned something new, never noticed that you spell it Majorca, I had to look it up lol. For us it’s Mallorca.
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Sailor
Wild ocean I feel you inside A‘
Wild ocean storms and waves so high
Filled only with sharks of all kind
And there is no place to hide
Getting seasick while I’m watching
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Ty hummer!
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Thank you guys you are very kind!
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„Umbrella“ ….oh gesh I hate that one too. Still don’t understand the hype they made around it.
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Seems we've become a nation of throw-away hearts
Just a nation of throw-away-hearts
….yes, I like this one and these lines especially.
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Hey,
I do like that piece, gives a good, positive feeling. Relatable and with a good ending.
Just a little thing: I think you can do better with the last line of verse one. To me it could be a little more…there. Stronger words I guess. … -
I agree on Sid’s idea. And btw sometimes you better keep it to yourself instead of spraying it on every wall…
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Nice one where ppl can relate to, especially for the younger ones situation like this often seems like „the end of the world“ and you captured this feeling well.
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Thank you for this good piece of work!
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Sad but nice one. It has a strong emotion. Would love to hear it with music.
I especially like the line: like a king reclaiming his throne.…there is so much anger and pain in this line
Hope I could have been helpful
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I do like this one! It has a nice flow and a good, strong message.
And btw thanks for bringing back memories of my time at university. 🙂 -
It’s a nice and „simple“ one, I like it.
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Nice way to „steal“ from yourself with the land of money line…but the whole piece has something. Just an idea I got while reading: why not bring the „true sense“ in? Could be a nice play-around with words and sound. That’s just my brain taking the p…
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Ty guys
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Thanks bhengen. All I know is that I want some old school instruments for this one. Still trying to figure out the final melody.
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Thanks Owen!
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THE SPELL
I know where you go when you leave A‘
It always breaks my heart in two
But I can not change what you do
And I’m too weak to change myself
Oh let me feel your fingertips
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Thanks Owen and Sid! You marked the weak spots that I too have had in mind. I especially wasn’t completely happy with C.
But I think I worked something out. Let me know if the new version is better. Didn’t do much, but I think it helps the fl… -
I love this! I had pictures and colours in my mind and felt every thing. Great stuff!
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Thanks Elvis and Sid!
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Hey,
I love the chorus you came up with. That’s a real good image.
I wondered a bit about vers 2, cause if the marriage is an open one, how or why „cheat secret on each other“? Maybe it’s just me and anyway I do like the rest of it.A very solid piece of work you got here. Some longer lines but it fits in the blues. Like Owen I especially like the land of money line. Sometimes it needs just one line to put up the mirror to our society.
RKThanks Owen. Sometimes it’s good to get a good night sleep and some friendly feedback to really finish a piece.
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