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  • I like that additional lyric and verse - I almost feel like it should come at the end after the time machine line and then repeat the chorus... hmmmm...

  • Welcome - loved the words to this song and you are right - it is a lot of great word play

    Please let us see the complete lyrics!

  • I used LALAI but yes - pulled out drums, bass, guitars, vocal into their own tracks and remixed - compressed drums (who am I - Jeff Lynne? lol), Eq bass, etc

  • This is a great song - love the picking and the chord changes

  • Could not agree more - someone else should always sing my songs(!)

  • I would start with the pre-chorus to set up the song:

    Her presence is a mega-force
    She's in me, she's the one
    Her draw is an attraction
    With the power of a thousand suns
    

    (I w…

  • Yes! I real blues tune! Love the Tom Petty sound.

    This one of the better songs I have heard posted in a while!

    Excellent

  • Love the lyrics here -

    You need to increase the tempo about 5bpm - that chorus would catch much better if the song were that tiny bit faster

  • And yes indeed that's a Yamaha keyboard... used to have a Casio, but after years decided to go a different direction... not sure I'm all that happy with the Yamaha - I may try to flip it and get something else... recommendations?

  • interesting point - philosophically, caged birds do sing and are beautiful... but they are not free?

    So introducing the concept after the general discussion of freedom in previous verses, caged birds sing, but its a bit like stale wine...?<…

  • This is an example of writing around a chorus. I have had the main part (can a caged bird sing) for years and years and I finally decided to try to write around it.

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