Almost Out of Time
ALMOST OUT OF TIME
https://jgkojak.bandcamp.com/track/almost-out-of-time
I'm almost out of time out of time
Since I first laid eyes on you
I been almost out of time out of time
Since you put me through what you put me through
I can disappear in an instant
And leave no trace of my memory
I can let it go if it costs me
A stain on my shrinking credibility
Yes I'm almost out of time out time
There's a few things I need to say to you
Yes I'm almost out of time out of time
I'm running out of words I have so few
Just can't remember the last place I saw you
Even now it's a distant memory
I can hold back standing in the window
I believe you've become a liability
I can disappear in an instant
And leave no trace of my memory
I can let it go if it costs me
A stain on my shrinking credibility
So
Yes I'm almost out of time
I'm almost out of time our of time
I'm almost out of time
In time if I only had a time machine
Comments
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The repeats on "out of time" give it a unique identify, it's defining sound.
The ending on "time machine" was surprising, and I like being surprised, that's probably my favorite part
The mood almost feels too upbeat for the lyric (assuming I'm reading it correctly!) I can certainly imagine it being given a different treatment, a slower, sadder style. But that wouldn't necessarily make it better!
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Please pardon me. @jgkojak2 After listening to your song, I walked into my kitchen and started hearing the following playing in my head as I love the "time machine" at the very end. Actually, I recently wrote a song called "Time Machine". That said, I keep hearing for a Chorus:
I'm almost out of time
Out of time
Need a time machine
I'm almost out of time
Out of time
Need a time machine
Since I first laid eyes on you
All the heartache you put me through
There's so much I need to say
Feels like time's slipping away
(just an idea for what a verse might look like with the Chorus)
Anyway, just thought I'd share the positive effect your song had on me,
Renee
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I like that additional lyric and verse - I almost feel like it should come at the end after the time machine line and then repeat the chorus... hmmmm...
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