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Bit of a cynical take on conclave! Certainly a vivid picture you've painted.
I notice this is about Pope Paul (one of them!) rather than the late Pope Francis.
Not sure who will enjoy this one, but it should certainly get some attenti…
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Nice! I'd be tempted in v2 to make it a question: Is your heart tempted...? Leave the tension there. Does the other person feel the same way? Keep the listener wondering.
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That's solid! really nice rocking sound.
Clear, easy to follow story line.
One people can really sink their teeth into.
Love to hear a new song from you!
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Thanks for that! Much easier to hear how the lyric and melody come together.
Beyond my previous comments, the only thing I noticed was the lead into the Bridge. Rather than clipping the line there, you might be better just finishing "be…
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Not at all silly Tommy. Just right on the money for that era. And the sound too.
Love this line: "But though I’d finally found the right combination, my hesitation led me astray"
and how you sing the final "I crumpled that paper and …
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Love the intro and the mesh of traditional chinese melody with modern pop - so appropriate!
I love "Blondes in Qipao's, wear a frown". Showing the contrast like that hits hard. If you can, I would lose the narrative "Tradition clashes with …
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My favorite line: "You needed me but I needed you more"
This is lovely. Really gentle and loving. It makes you warm inside just hearing it.
I love all the specifics, though I would say that likely makes it less commercial, but I don't…
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Noticeably better Rob! Much cleaner, no fuzz and I can hear both the guitar and your vocals more clearly.
Like the way you're bringing a second guitar in and out of the mix, and the 2nd vocal repeating "better" with the hard panning.
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Just beautiful Gavin! A father's love and pride really shines through in this one.
And beautifully played too, loved the guitar, and the violin!
Something for her to treasure always.
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Can I just take a moment to congratulate all of you on having a sensible and reasonable discussion on AI generated music? It's far too rare, and lovely to see.
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Written by a pair of amateurs I believe, but we'll see how it goes!
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@sidshovel actually I'm planning to give them "Bottle of Vintage Wine" amongst others!
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I like it very much so far. A rousing anthem both musically and lyrically. Lots of symbolism there with "Fly, brave eagle, fly" and the references to Prometheus and Icarus.
I like the military style drums in the intro as well.
Nicely …
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Very poignant indeed.
Your second chorus is slightly different to the first, and to me, better. I particularly liked
time to find a new me.
in the second line, rather than just
to f…
Thanks Sid, I'll give it a whirl!
Thank you! Good to know the outro works, at least for some people! It's much better than an abrupt ending, but a little long for my taste.
Nice to hear how it sounds in its final form. Thanks for sharing that!
@ChrisPrice Ha! Slightly ironic, but I'm happy for any of your tunes to come up in my playlist, including that one!…
You're having some troubles lately with those darned Soundcloud links!
Very smooth Carroll. Reads very well.
You might consider "things were going my way" → "things started going my way", just to emphasize the change.
Loneliness is a curse.
I really like the premise of this. Sitting down to a meal with the ghost of Billy the Kid as if he was still alive.
Strong visuals and details there to bring it to life.
Nicely done!
Just a hint of sadness there at the end that she's so out of it she doesn't realize she is dancing alone. But then would she care even if she knew?
But mostly kept fairly light. A party girl waiting for party night. When you're young that's…
I think this would make a great track for an album rather than a single.
The melody is a bit subtle and takes the odd unexpected turn. It hasn't got the sing-along factor of a hit single, but it rewards the listener.
Loved the harmon…
Congrats Bill on trying out the new format. I think you got it just right.
@BeatlesFan64 Cheers Tommy! Yes, they were good suggestions, and just looking back, I didn't think thank …
I liked these lines:
The vase has fallen
And shattered like our friendship
And how that leads into Shattered glass, broken vows
It felt a bit cramped here: "Could it be the calm"
I'd try to vary…
I like the rhythm and rhyme of it. It's not really my style of choice, and I'm sure that affects how I see it.
I feel a bit remote from it. It's got a slice of life feel, but I don't really connect with it or feel touched emotionally.
Bit of a melancholic vibe to it. Bit of dirt and grit as well.
Lyric reads well. I particularly like "no-tell motel"
You just know that one win won't be enough. He's going to keep going until he cant do it anymore.
I like the fast paced sound of it.
The melting faces puts me in mind of Dali.
It's a lovely collection of songs! I was lucky enough to listen before all the plays ran out!
What is your thinking for releasing them as an album rather than individually?
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