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It's a lovely collection of songs! I was lucky enough to listen before all the plays ran out!
What is your thinking for releasing them as an album rather than individually?
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I love the way you sing Hallelujah!
I'm afraid this one isn't communicating much to me. If there's meant to be a message in it, then I'm not getting it.
Done in your trademark style.
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I use only the free version of Soundcloud, but for me that's a place to store and access a recording, not based on trying to reach an audience. I'm afraid I don't have any experience in how to promote your songs.
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I think the shape of the song is all there. It has a raw power, and I would second Gavin's comment about honesty and intimacy.
What it needs now is to be set to music. Then you can make any fine adjustments to fit the meter, cadence or rhym…
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That's a very polished sound. Do you mean it took 100 tries on Suno to get this particular track? Or that you generated 100 tracks and took samples from different ones? Either way that's a big commitment! But Congratulations! It turned out very f…
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That's very sweet, without being overdone. Lovely song.
I found myself singing: Of how beautiful, beautiful, you were so you might try that for size.
Thoroughly enjoyed my listen!
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Very different style for you, both lyrically and musically! But a good one.
Yes, "self" is a bit hard to rhyme, which is a shame.
So a bit of innuendo here?
To my mother it would annoy
felt a little …
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@TammyB thanks for the thoughtful feedback, Tammy! I'm reading that as meaning the music isn't emotional enough, which …
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Hope you're right Elvis! At the moment it feels like watching a slow motion train wreck, but we're all on the train!!
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This one feels like a dream sequence to me. Really vivid images that morph from one to the next without me necessarily understanding them, or the thread between them.
By the end, it feels like the narrator has been reincarnated as a tree o…
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Lots of detail captured there! Clear message and viewpoint.
"an' where, eagles fly no more." is a strong line, though maybe not harsh enough given the rest of the lyric.
Well written.
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I can always post the lyrics for you, Carroll, if you get stuck. Just msg me. I took the liberty of making a direct link to the song rather than just to your Soundcloud account.
I like the sound of this, sort of rock / blues crossover. Chor…
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An interesting piece, if somewhat esoteric. I like the way you have phrases split across lines.
I think I prefer the first version where it evolves from spoken word into music, as that feels like a forward progression to me.
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I found the music very soothing, light, positive. The lyric is a bit different though, there's an undercurrent of darkness, things going to fail. I'm not sure if that contrast was deliberate to create tension, or just turned out that way!
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Very powerful language, well done.
Loved how casually you dropped "everyday" into "Hearing the who shot who stories today, everyday"
I found the lyric had the most punch where it was speaking about Black women more in the abstract. T…
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Oh I like how that came out! Got a beatlesesque sound to it, which feels appropriate.
I could listen to this many times.
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@bhengen Doesn't matter who found it Bill, you were with me all the way down that yellow brick road!
Has a curious childlike quality to it, though the language is clearly aimed at adults, as is the musical style you've chosen for it.
Some lovely phrases like: neon's flowing wine
And I like the rhyming structure. Hard to keep that go…
This one was both obscure and painful. But sorted now.
Big thanks to Bill @bhengen who was helping a lot
Ok, I think we finally have it sorted. If anyone is having problems please let me know.
Wonderful chorus, really draws you in. Nice mixture of emotion and story.
Good stuff, Elvis!
I like what you have Tommy, but I feel like it might benefit from a short chorus as well. Sort of:
10,000 words could never express
10,000 words, my happiness
Nice! I particularly like the verses.
I had trouble with "the circle" in the chorus too. I think "circle of light" or, as Bill had it, "like the light from..." will make it clearer that it's the light making the circle.
But the rest f…
There's quite a bit of repetition in the song, and I think that works a treat. It puts me in mind of people running around screaming, so totally supports your message.
Was this one inspired by "I am the walrus" by any chance?
I can see an emphasis on the sounds reflected there.
For me, a song is a chance to communicate something to the listener, whether through the words, mood or music. I'm not get…
Wonderful! It's amazing how fast the block can disappear once something clicks - and how painful it is until it does!
Lovely.
Nice track. Is this someone you know Elvis?
How about "you sew a lot of nerves?" ;)
The reply sounds a bit pro forma, but hey it's encouraging! Worth a shot. Best of luck, Elvis, you deserve success.
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