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The title is the bomb, and you use it really well in the song. The music is great and the video is awesome. Anything with horse captures my attention!
I enjoy your lyrics very much. I t would be nice to read them while I listen. I would lov…
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You have some very beautiful and cerebral lines here. I really love the lyrics even though they feel sad. The music is enjoyable, and the video is captivating. As in Even not forgetting Comment by Andrea May 2023
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This feels a little like it fits in a bigger story. I can imagine it as a piece in a movie. The visuals are really nice - I can picture the whole song as I listen. I like the feel of the music and vocals. It has a dreamy feel which feels like a g…
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I can see why this is a favorite! It has a special message that hits the hearts for those who understand. It's super enjoyable without understanding too.
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A change in plans can be quite adventuresome! A great hook that you use perfectly. Love this fun story with the upbeat music.
I don't understand the "cover nearly blown". It could possibly fit in V2.
I like Owen's idea for a bridge …
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This is really taking shape with the changes so far. The hook is great and has a nice country feel throughout. I love the first line. It sets up the theme with a fantastic visual.
I like the ghosted line. Feels modern. I would suggest 'She…
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This packs a punch with a strong message. I really like the lyrics and the music. The contrast between the dark lyrics and light music is interesting. I think I like it! A video would make this even more powerful, but I truly like it as is. Excel…
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I like how this is taking shape. It's dark, but the emotion is powerful, which I like. I would like to know more about who 'Jane' is. She just kind of shows up at his door. I would like to connect with the relationship between this person and Jan…
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This is so darn catchy and upbeat. Such a great feel to the music and melodies. I was tapping my toes the whole way through. I could imagine this in a movie. Super enjoyable!!
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I like the hook line and I think it works well in the song.
I feel like scene 1 could be a song in itself. Then the song continued into a story that feels like an entire movie. So cool! Twists and turns that kept me entertained from beginn…
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I like the lyrics. Some super cool lines throughout. There are parts that are a bit mysterious, but they get me to thinking about the meaning and how it all fits together.
This part particularly makes me wonder:
"It just seems like
I like the title. Hope you post it soon :)
This is a powerful song. The remembrances a dying (or long gone) town and the glorious foliage and flowers is beautifully sad. I love the folksy feel. I hope I understood the lyrics correctly, but even if I'm wrong, it's lovely and moving.
Theatrical awesomeness! The style reminds me a bit of the musical 'Hair', but I am sure there are better comparisons. I am not sure what the theme of this musical would be ;) I love the melodies and the energy. The lyrics are interesting with som…
I totally enjoyed this song. I like the lyrics and the music. The chorus is really great :)
You have some good feedback for improvement. I can't add anything new.
I didn't want to bump my post to the top, but feel I need to thank everyone for the thoughtful feedback. It is greatly appreciated!
in Murderer and Thief - collaboration from FAWM Comment by Andrea April 2023
This is so fun and enjoyable. I love the wonderful visuals in the lyrics. I can watch it all play in my head as I listen. Love the guitar and vocals. Sounds like a super fun trip!
This is so sad yet relatable. It feels so real and true. I love the story on SC about this song came to be and it makes sense how it feels so real.
I love your funny side, but this too is awesome. I enjoyed the listen very much!
When…
Lots to like here. I love your vocals, and the background vocals are splendid. I love the title and the way you use it.
The lyrics are moving and powerful.
I am reading this as a person who is submitting their life to the river. I w…
I really like the vibe of the steel guitar. The harmonies are very nice. It's interesting and enjoyable. Cool song!
Owen, thanks for the very kind feedback! I love that you like the rhyming on
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A clever ruse I see right through
I was so happy when I thought of that. It feels great to hear someone else likes i…
Thanks, Joseph, for this nice feedback! I was so pleased with the musical treatment for these lyrics. I'm glad you like it too. Others have also said it reminds them of Sting. That is a wonderful compliment.
I don't think you are alone in the waiting room. I think this is so relatable! I love the tango-ish music. It's like you are in a dance with the doctors. I love it. Superb all around!
These lines are killer:
"while yesterday and tomoe…
Hmmm - the autotune? It's ok, but I think you have a cool voice. IMO, the autotune is too much.
What I like. I like the lyrics and the melodies. This has a very cool vibe. I almost feel like I'm flying when I listen.
I am not sure wh…
Hi Joseph,
Thanks for asking about me. I have been working on lots of lyrics during FAWM. You have persuaded me to post one of my collaborations for review.
During FAWM so much happens. It is so much fun to have my lyrics turned into…
I love the folksy sound. I wanted to clap and sing along. Excellent lyrics and catchy melodies. This is a feel-good song with a wonderful theme. I love it!!
Hi Joseph,
I really like the lyrics. I tried to find something to pick on but couldn't. It's a bit mysterious on its own, but I know how it fits in the story. I can't wait to hear the song.
I', thinking you could make a new post for t…
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