New original song - You no understand
Written and recorded on my desk on a New Year's Eve. What do you think?
https://gloriousmagicalfields.bandcamp.com/track/you-no-understand
Lyrics:
Is this my life?
Beginning or end ?
Too much time
I haven't got to spend
You no understand
All my life
I've been tested
It's comin' round again
You don't understand
You don't understand
I was there
And you were where?
Comin' down the dirty streets
I saw the lights
Oh so bright
Now I'm livin'
In a bad dream
I can't wait until sunset
I need to get it now
You no understand
You no understand
I was there
And you were where?
Walkin' down a dirty street
I saw the light
It was all right
Now I'm livin'
In a nightmare
Comments
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maybe it's me.. not sure what you mean by - you no understand, otherwise interesting lyrics
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I'm with bhengen. You NO understand ?? Why not just say as you said in other places, You DON'T understand. This keeps it conversational of which a lyric should be. Also, I'm lost on: "I need to get it now" get what? What's is IT that you need to get? Other than that, this is a great start Rob. With a clearer structure and clearer message, this lyric can work. Dig in and keep working on it!
Renee
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Maybe because "You no understand"?😉
I think when the lyrics came to me I had nothing in mind, was just "riffing" and that came out, sort of like someone with a foreign accent. Then I changed it in the song giving a contrast of weirdness, or so I thought.
As far as the "it" goes that was meant to be interpreted anyway you want. But's it's kind of dumb in that I'm saying I need it by sunset. Not too many people say, al least if you are not acting in a movie.
Most of the lyrics has no intention except one, "I was there" and "I saw the light". I did, for what I was trying to get across. I will post the formula on how to do it at some point in the future for the benefit of mankind.
Thanks for listening and your positive comments.
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