New original song - You no understand

robwills

Written and recorded on my desk on a New Year's Eve. What do you think?

https://gloriousmagicalfields.bandcamp.com/track/you-no-understand

Lyrics:

Is this my life?

Beginning or end ?

Too much time

I haven't got to spend

You no understand

All my life

I've been tested

It's comin' round again

You don't understand

You don't understand

I was there

And you were where?

Comin' down the dirty streets

I saw the lights

Oh so bright

Now I'm livin'

In a bad dream

I can't wait until sunset

I need to get it now

You no understand

You no understand

I was there

And you were where?

Walkin' down a dirty street

I saw the light

It was all right

Now I'm livin'

In a nightmare

bhengen

maybe it's me.. not sure what you mean by - you no understand, otherwise interesting lyrics

HummerWisdom

I'm with bhengen. You NO understand ?? Why not just say as you said in other places, You DON'T understand. This keeps it conversational of which a lyric should be. Also, I'm lost on: "I need to get it now" get what? What's is IT that you need to get? Other than that, this is a great start Rob. With a clearer structure and clearer message, this lyric can work. Dig in and keep working on it!

Renee

robwills

Maybe because "You no understand"?😉

I think when the lyrics came to me I had nothing in mind, was just "riffing" and that came out, sort of like someone with a foreign accent. Then I changed it in the song giving a contrast of weirdness, or so I thought.

As far as the "it" goes that was meant to be interpreted anyway you want. But's it's kind of dumb in that I'm saying I need it by sunset. Not too many people say, al least if you are not acting in a movie.

Most of the lyrics has no intention except one, "I was there" and "I saw the light". I did, for what I was trying to get across. I will post the formula on how to do it at some point in the future for the benefit of mankind.

Thanks for listening and your positive comments.