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the refrain really works, sounds good. the story i think goes with the music too but it was difficult to understand for me because it was going so fast.
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haha. Thanos (the b…
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I agree, its sad and well written. simple and emotional not overdoing it on "homeless details" . interesting perspective too. well done.
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sounds good.
the Avengers might stop by tho.
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i can understand why many people in the music biz don't like Ai. using it to fool people is a big reason. It will eventually find its place. Ai isn't gong away, it will only get better. I think it will also force real artist to step up and make b…
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nice sound and melody. i like the the progressive chorus and how you did the last line of each (on and on and on...)
something to consider : i feel like the story begins and ends in the same place.
beginning = didn't know/ go with …
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80s it was the best …
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reminds me a lot of Nine Inch Nails. Angsty, angry, troubled.
sounds good.
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you defiantly have a go to style/sound.
this one wasn't as strong as the previous 2 you have posted. IMO. The lyrics don't seem to be as structured or polished.
The "i did some crazy things ..." line the way it was sung didn't fit …
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great song. love the angle and uniqueness it has. its different. The title sounds like a difficult song to write but you did great job.
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Thank you! 😊 Im glad…
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thanks for the sugge…
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i like the how you put title line at the end of verse, then did something different on the chorus.
one small thing i noticed. "i'm all out of blues" if he is out, he doesn't have them any more so how are they gong to kill him? .
nic…
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I don't have anything different to add from what others have said already.
Really well done. Great hook. 👍️💪
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the female vocal is the way to go on this one, fits and sounds cool.
the last half of the song i feel is stronger than the first, with the internal rhymes, slant rhymes. then cry in the verse with strife in the chorus.
that being sa…
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i like the internal rhymes on the refrain.
interesting style choice with the cello. Gives me a idea, what would an aggressive cello sound like over a EDM beat? with heavy auto tune lyrics. if you take requests. 🙂
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Nice one. I like the up beat rock you put in this. it fits well.
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i like that line, its funny cuz, if you're alive you have outlived all the dead. 😆
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this works. talkin bout life. 😉
Like a soft hip hop, maybe theres another name for it.? I like the different sections keeps it interesting through out but still holds together as a cohesive song.
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somethings always coming at ya. 😁
nice tune. good playing , you do it all siamotainously? That takes skill and coordination. 👍️
There is something fun about a big snow storm. Especially if you live in the country, in the city its a p…
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sounds good. i like the brass. very easy going happy warm summer day feeling.
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ha ha
like the swampy bluesy sound.
no junk in the trunk tho 😁
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great lyrics, reads as a poem just on its own. great imagery and metaphor.
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Funny, I like the twist. the whistling holds it all together.
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love that blues fused with the dance beat. So many applications for something like that. so cool.
i don't mean this as a negative, the lyrics remind of the refrigerator poetry magnets. i used to do something similar, kinda a free flow th…
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sounds cool. you got the guitar and atmosphere right. vocal fits nice.
if MC Escher wrote lyrics it would be a lot like this.
I think that is what you were going for.
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yup, nobody wants to see that, bring my 20's back.
cool take, funny and true. prefect song style for this.
the one line i thought could be better. 'love aint perfect, bodies ain't soft" in my experience by that age bodies are defin…
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This has a really great overall sound and rhythm. it totally works together with how you structured the lyrics.
some things to consider that i noticed.
-using the 'you' as the repeated rhyme at the end of every other line works here…
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Thank you so much! I…
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just some things i noticed for consideration.
the 2 extra long lines "but only certain...", "but this control..." might cause trouble depending on your melody.
careful on the care /stare rhymes could sound over used depending on me…
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