I Really Wanted To Believe You

A few days back I'd posted a song with the same title but in a political fashion. Since I really liked the title more than the previous song, thought I'd take a stab at a love song/break up song which I don't often write💔. Thank you for any feedback.
I REALLY WANTED TO BELIEVE YOU
[Verse 1]
Goodbye won’t be easy
But staying is more tiresome
‘Cuz I’ve wasted so much time
Climbing from under your thumb
And the trust we had built
Has come crumbling down
When a man can’t look his woman in the eyes
It’s time to get out ‘a town
[Chorus]
I really wanted to believe you
Darlin’, I really did
But the lies you told, put my heart on hold
Now, leaving’s all there is
All there is
Is leaving to do
[Verse 2]
You promised to stop drinking
Spending money like its water
But your promises, like blue smoke
They only turn to vapor
And the home we had built
Is but an empty tomb
When a man can’t keep the promises he’s made
‘I love yous’ just won’t do
[Chorus]
I really wanted to believe you
Darlin’, I really did
But the lies you told, put my heart on hold
Now, leaving’s all there is
All there is
Is leaving to do
[Instrumental]
[Chorus]
I really wanted to believe you
Darlin’, I really did
But the lies you told, put my heart on hold
Now, leaving’s all there is
All there is
Is leaving…just leaving to do.
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Comments
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Nice!
Feels like there could be a good rhyme in the chorus using believin' and leaving. Maybe:
I tried hard for believin'
Now all there is, is leaving
All there is
is leaving left to do
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Good song, nice lyrics.
Structure's good.
Something to consider:
"Now, leaving’s all there is
All there is
Is leaving to do".
Too many "is" and two together is distracting, consider a break, e.g.
All there is left
Is leaving (left) to do" (optional)
Sid
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hmmmm, both great suggestions. Let me try them. Thank you, Owen and Sid!
Renee
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