City of shame
Verse
The city of angels, the city of lights
Where nobody sleeps; they party all night.
The glamour the glitter, the lure of L.A.
Posting on Twitter; Tongues clatter away.
Chorus
City of Angels, eternal flame.
They’ve sold their souls
For money and fame.
City of Angels, city of shame.
Verse
The city of angels- the city of lights.
The home of the stars whose names are in lights.
The sinners the winners, the draw of L.A.
Posted on Facebook; their coy little games.
Chorus
City of Angels, eternal flame.
They’ve sold their souls
For money and fame.
City of Angels, city of shame.
Bridge
The wealthy the famous all wear their shades.
No worries no woes they’ve got it made.
Verse
The city of angels, the city of lights
Where nobody sleeps; they party all night.
The glamour the glitter, the lure of L.A.
Posting on Twitter; Tongues clatter away.
Chorus
City of Angels, eternal flame.
They’ve sold their souls
For money and fame.
City of Angels, city of shame.
Comments
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Message comes through loud and clear here!
I like the chorus, I think that's the strongest part, as it should be.
If anything, the criticism feels a bit light to me. Posting on Twitter or Facebook is perhaps false and shallow, but it doesn't feel like it carries a great moral weight. Obviously you have other criticisms mentioned as well.
With "city of angels" being repeated, there might be an option to reference demons or in some way lean into that, but you may want to avoid religious connotations in favor of social commentary.
I like the LA references like "home of the stars whose names are in lights", I think those help tie it specifically to this location. Otherwise the money and fame type references could be applied to many cities.
Good stuff.
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Hi Carroll.
Nice song, liked it. Just building a bit on what RDM said, the shame needs to be a bit focused and comparable with the affluence and shallowness detailed. My first thought would be the homeless as a counterpoint.
Sid
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