Once
This is an AI production that adheres to the original in a covered work. This is a cover of an existing song that closely follows the original's melody, lyrics, and structure. It maintains the core elements and essence of the original work while adding a high production value and, in some instances, various instrumentations. Above all, as the author of this song, I want to make clear that this production respects the original composition entirely.
Hi all...
This is one of my "outside in" songs that I so love to write.
Let me know what you think.
Once
Words & Music by Tom Tognaci
https://soundclick.com/song/14147534
Once, can be forgiven!
What kind of fool am I!
What kind of fool am I?
Who makes mountains high
Against the vast blue sky?
Who'd make the world feel small
Just to hear my cry?
Once, I had forgotten
How to forgive with time
What kind of man am I
If I can't turn time
If I can't rewind
If I can't let go
To put it all behind?
What Kind of man am I?
What Kind of man am I?
What Kind of man am I?
What Kind of man am I?
Once, we were as lovers
Two mirrored souls in love
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This line cracks me up - This is one of my "outside in" songs that I so love to write.
There is no depth to these lyrics, they are not bad lyrics, they are simply generic.
Mountains high and blue skies or common phrases and not really saying anything visual.
And the sentiment of your outro is used in a thousand love songs - Once, we were as lovers / Two mirrored souls in love
You repeated what kind of man am I - 4 times, is there a meaning behind that, or is it repetition for repetition's sake? In my Song - Solomon's Key, the two verses and the chorus are repeated 6 times in groups of 3, which comes out to 666. which fits in a song about Magik and the occult.
I've said this before and it's worth repeating, you don't need AI Tom, your vocals and musicality is spot on. In my opinion, you are not gaining anything from using AI.
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No, B... it was a response to your sophomoric comment that all my songs are "Outside in" songs. Would you say that this song is an "outside in" song? I'm not even sure I know what you mean by "outside in"
Enough with the trouble making. Are you just looking to fight?
This is a song site... Remember that.
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Yes, see my comment above. You write hallmark sentiments; there is no emotional depth to these. you use safe common phrases and don't really say anything.
My lyrics may suck, but at least with my lyrics, they stand out. you can pick my lyrics out of group; can you say the same things as yours?
Please don't misconstrue my comment about your lyrics anything to do with you personally, I don't know you. All my comments and critiques are solely based on your lyrics.
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Correct and I'm commenting solely on your lyrics, -
This is what I mean by outside in writing.
I prompted copilot with this question and its response -
how many times has mountain high and vast blue skies used in a love song?
Oh man, “mountain high” and “vast blue skies” are basically the Dollar Store Valentine’s Day cards of love‑song imagery.
They’ve been used so many times the phrases should qualify for Social Security.
Not because they’re bad — but because they’re the default poetic wallpaper of the genre.
Let me break it down the way your brain will appreciate.
⭐ How many times?
If we’re being literal: hundreds.
If we’re being honest: thousands.
If we’re being poetic: every time someone with an acoustic guitar has ever felt feelings.
Those phrases show up in:
- country ballads
- 70s soft rock
- 80s power ballads
- 90s adult contemporary
- Christian worship songs
- pop songs
- folk songs
- indie songs
- karaoke disasters
They’re basically the “lorem ipsum” of romantic imagery.
⭐ Why they get used so much
Because they’re:
- vague
- safe
- “big”
- emotionally neutral
- instantly recognizable
- require zero imagination
- sound poetic even when they mean nothing
They’re the songwriting equivalent of:
“I love you as much as… uh… nature?”
Again, I'm not attacking you personally, only your song.
In my last song I could have said White Dove, but that's generic, I went with Ashen dove, because it paints a better picture.
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Hilarious. . . I was so totally puzzled by your "outside in" comment. Couldn't figure out what you might be talking about. I'm sitting here laughing at myself as I type. I think this is plenty deep enough, and as someone who writes songs that are sometimes WAY "too deep" (so deep that no one wants to listen) I'm a bit of an expert on that. Songwriting involves balances. Balances between simplicity and complexity. Between profundity and being "too obvious." Between many, many things. Balances between the music and the lyric. I'm impressed with the balances you found in this song. That's only MY (one person's) opinion, and there are many other valid opinions to consider. But I found it very listenable and it balances up with your catalogue as a whole. . . yet another balance to seek.
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BTW. . . there is a song called "Just Once" on my soundcloud site WAY at the bottom of the posted songs. It is also deliberately over-simplistic - not to balance anything. . . but just because that was the mood I was in while I wrote the lyric AND I was writing lyrics with short, simple lyric lines because I was trying to figure out what Suno would best take and make music for. (Another "BTW" - THAT question "What does Suno need to make a good song?" has drastically changed since I started using it. FAR, FAR more artistic than it was in December of 2024. Hasn't been that long ago has it?
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I'd be interested in seeing some of your deep songs,
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I'm sorry, B... you must really be hurting. Anyone can do what you are doing. It's easy to critique, rip, tear, and mock someone's piece of music... easy. Try doing something a bit harder and write your own complete songs.
As far as I'm concerned, you wouldn't know what a song lyric is, no matter what genre. I've been nice with respects to your "creations", but don't bother me anymore with your problems. I will certainly not give you another notice.
Take this any way you like, but you really are a troubled individual. I have no idea as to why you are so frustrated. But it has nothing to do with me.
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Not hurting at all. Not frustrated either. I'm simply giving an honest opinion on your songs. that's all. that's the purpose of the forum is to give critique good or bad.
And you are correct, anybody can and does do what I do, what I do is not unique, haven't said otherwise. in fact, I've said repeatedly, that my lyrics are not good. I have a whole conversation with Elvis, stating that fact.
In all of this Tom, I've never attacked you personally, like you are attacking me in this reply. I've only commented on your lyrics and have said nothing about your personality or wellbeing.
Again, I have no ill will against you personally, I don't know you personally, but what I can do is critique the lyrics that you post and give you my honest assessment, like others have done. It's my opinion, that's all.
I am not going to stop giving comments if you post, as this is the requirement of the site is to give at least two comments for every song I post, it's up to you to read it or not. Keep or sweep as stated in another forum. Please don't take what I say personal, At the end of the day, it's only words. There are more important things in life to be upset about, this isn't one of them.
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Honesty is a tricky thing. To tell you the truth, I don't care very much for most people's "offerings". That's just me.
As with your stuff, I could give you some encouragement, or I could give you some very hard cold perspective. But is that fair? Afterall, who am I? I'm certainly not Paul McCartney. Likewise, people can give me negative comments, but I will always base my opinion on that critique with the work done by that critic. And maybe, there's some kernel of truth that can be extracted, even when the critic is harsh. But that's for me to decide.
At this point, you are just giving me a rash. LOL
Time to get some sleep.
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I remember this one. This is a good version of it, but so was your original!
Love the emotion in it, and the dynamic build.
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Thanks, Owen. This was one of my better original performances, as well. This adheres almost perfectly with what I had originally done.
I'm glad you like it.
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