That's for you
That Giant One -That's for you (version 1)
Lyrics: Me/ Music: Mureka
I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you
I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you
I'm sorry for the things that I have
For the words I said, for the things I thought were cool
I'm sorry for the silence I gave
For the words unsaid and the pain I put on you
I'm sorry if my songs are sad
If the melodies is trash and the lyrics talk bad 'bout you
You know that it's already late
Forget my face — I won't never talk to you
I know it was a disaster
Everything got bad, I'm sorry for what you went through
They say it's part of life
It changes our story, but I took a piece of you.
I'm writing all this for you
Hope you understand and find a way to find you
It's just part of success
Not everything's a blessing — I know somebody once told you
But wait, slow down, take a seat
There's something that I should've already told you
I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you
I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you
I'm sorry for your broken car
I didn't apologize— I couldn't even look at you
I'm sorry for taking your heart
But maybe this is the last time I talk to you
Everything have changed, I gave back
Your pants, your shoes, your cat — everything that I should
But that's the part of success
Not everything's a blessing — I know somebody once told you
I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you
I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you
Comments
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cool melody for the lyrics.
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Nice! Modern sound. Overall I think this holds up well. Feels like a breakup song.
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I like some of the details you've put in there like the broken car, pants, cat etc. It gives it the feeling of truth.
Like the car/heart rhyme there too.
I'm less keen on your chorus. The repetition of 'through' works. Always makes it easier to sing and remember. But these lines don't appear to be saying anything - at least to me, always pays to hear multiple opinions. "I've been through" suggests "I've been through a lot". And the same for you. But who is they? Everyone else? That makes it less intimate and intense to me. Better to stick to just you and me. And if we've each been through a lot what is the implication of that? The meaning? Perhaps it's too much and now we need to separate. Perhaps it's made us stronger and tighter and we should stay together? But "that’s for you" just doesn't seem to follow.
Sometimes the sound is more important than the meaning - that's your call. And in any case, get as many opinions as you can and see which ones resonate with you.
Worth pursuing!
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Thanks a lot for your feedback. I'm new to writing songs, so noticing that both comments I got were good makes me happy. About the meaning of the song, I tried to show in the chorus that everyone has been through but this song is for that person. I don't know if it's good or not, but I like to keep my lyrics somewhat open so people can have their own interpretation and imagination of the story. I also like to include some hidden meanings so that, if someone notices it, they can think about them, just like you did on this one. For example, maybe if you listen tomorrow, you can find another part of the song that relates to you, and so on. So I try to connect with people and shape it according to the day/mood.
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Any comments from me should be taken as "have you thought about...". And now you have! The choices are always yours, and you should go with what feels right to you 😀
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Thank you again for your feedback.
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This has a really great overall sound and rhythm. it totally works together with how you structured the lyrics.
some things to consider that i noticed.
-using the 'you' as the repeated rhyme at the end of every other line works here, i think it would make it stronger if that was the only place it was used. for example "You know that it's already late"==> "I know that it's already late" , keep the same meaning and message tweaking some of the words.- maybe maybe not, its something i would experiment with. not at the cost of the rhythm though.
-I been through, you been through, they been through — that’s for you | sort of along the same thought process i think it would be clearer- I been through, we been through, they been through — all for you. -
-grammar fix = Everything have changed, I gave back ==> everything has changed...
-I was sort of waiting for a little bridge/change up section, then come back in with the main melody at the end.
i like the cat line, i thought it was funny.
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Thanks for you feedback. Yea, for sure i'll consider some of the feedbacks here.
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