Joanne
This is an old song of mine. Was on the previous version of the site, lost after the crash.
I've used the Suno cover feature to make this new version, but the words & music are mine
Suno Cover: https://suno.com/song/09b8d153-7908-4f4e-bdb2-6fa5503e887b
Original: https://soundclick.com/song/5401669
Joanne
[Verse]
Sit tight, act right,
maybe he'll come tonight
waiting for the lover of your dream life
Drink more, like a whore
Maybe you can get a score
Some day you're gonna make a good wife
[Pre-chorus]
Late nights sitting by the fireside
Trying to make sense of the life you're in
Got no answers and you're getting tired
So you give yourself to the dreams within
[Chorus]
Jo-o-o-anne
Heart set free in the wind to roam
No-o-o ma-an
Knows how to care when you're on your own
Jo-o-o-anne
Heart set free in the wind to roam
No-o-o ma-an
Knows how to care when you're on your own
[Verse]
Hold out, it's cold out
Someone's got you sold out
Writing on the wall says it's over
Hands maul, tears fall
It ain't no love at all
He leaves some money and it's over
[Pre-chorus]
Late nights crying on a city street
Phoning a friend but there's no one home
You give your love to everyone you meet
But you wake up on your own
[Chorus]
Jo-o-o-anne
Heart set free in the wind to roam
No-o-o ma-an
Knows how to care when you're on your own
Jo-o-o-anne
Heart set free in the wind to roam
No-o-o ma-an
Knows how to care when you're on your own
[Outro, slowing]
Jo-anne, Jo-anne, Joanne
....Joanne [trailing off]
Comments
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I read the lyrics first...couldn't tell much about it
Took a listen and it fit, Sounds good to me.. Owen
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this is cool, love the 80s rock. Story is tight and clear. sounds good totally fits the genre.
couple small nit picks: "someday you'll make a good wife" maybe but only if your Richard Gere. 😁
the "knows how to care when you're on you're own" is the weakest part due to having to cram all the words in there. slight rephrasing to fix maybe?
over all i like it. 👍️
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Really catchy, a sad story, how many Joan in the tres, very good lyrics Owen, and your version is really special, so personal and authentic, as if you were singing in a party @RainyDayMan
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I like how you write conversationally. Your words really paint a picture. I like the original, and you did a really good job with matching the right melody for those lyrics.
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@Tex @MuskieBait44 @MoraAmaroLaLoba @bhengen Thank you all for your comments!
@Tex I know what you mean. The music can make all the difference
@MuskieBait44 Actually you're not far off with the Richard Gere analogy. Although it is written from a 3rd party perspective, that line is really more of an internal thought - a dream.
"knows how to care when you're on you're own". I'll have to think on that. Nothing better immediately leaps to mind, but I'll let it simmer.
@MoraAmaroLaLoba Thanks for checking both versions, Mora. I write songs that I can play myself, so there'll always be a personal version, but it may not always be the best one!
@bhengen Glad you enjoyed it! It was one where I wrote the music first then fitted the lyric to it, so maybe that helped.
This is one of the very first songs I ever wrote, circa 1981, so definitely meant for that 80s vibe.
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I love that this is from 1981 - one of the best things about SUNO is giving life to those really old recordings -
I get an REM/Murmur kind of vibe from the original that I don't get from SUNO version - what prompts did you use for SUNO?
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Hey there Rainy... Gotta love Suno. The Suno version brings out the beauty of the writing.
The only line I got stuck on is, "So you give yourself to the dreams within" Kind of a bump in the road, for me, as I was reading / listening along.
Other than that, the song has a great Bryan Adams vibe.
Good job!
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Ya kinda lost me in story , But I kinda got it finally after listening it to twice
Yeah its got that 80's feel
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I can understand that Elvis! It's not a story song in the usual way of those. Things implied rather than stated outright.
Appreciate the feedback!
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