Remorse
Lyrics - Me, Music - Suno
https://suno.com/song/2ee9d743-64e2-41fc-a68f-de11aa546410?sh=AR53nZ0MyYKXn4bE
Not sure about the second line in verse 1. think musty might sound better..
[Verse 1]
The black mausoleum door is ancient rust
The cold stone room stale stench and must
concrete tombed my friend suspended trance
He comes alive from the necromancer's dance
[Verse 2]
The flickering yellow candlelight mesmerizing
Three shadows waltzing on the floor tantalizing
The bridge between the living and dead embrace
From ashen pale transform life warms his face
[Chorus]
We all wear masks of hidden truths
Behind locked doors of skeletal closets
Painted smiles hidden shadowed realities
A swirl of facts and lies blended composite
[Verse 3]
I now know what was not disclosed before
The reason my friend entombed behind the door
For death's warning I had failed to heed
Innocent lives discarded and left to bleed
[Verse 4]
The nightly body count in groups of three
Quick were the attacks no chance to flee
Deaths' gloating laughter at me he mocks
He lays before me binding chains and locks
[Chorus]
We all wear masks of hidden truths
Behind locked doors of skeletal closets
Painted smiles hidden shadowed realities
A swirl of facts and lies blended composite
[Bridge]
As childhood friends we made a blood pack
That which died first we would bring back
But what my friend failed to inform me
A prolific horrific serial killer was he
[Outro]
Solemnly I constrain my friend in locks and chains
No longer innocent souls blood falls as rain
The necromancer rhythmical dance of entombment
I leave my friend bound in eternal solitudement
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That is brilliant, what a tale! The reincarnation of a serial liller, well almost!
The story is gripping, the music is innovative and spell-binding, with lots of spectral harmonies sprinkled throughout.
A unique piece of work, Bill. Even I could follow this. Enjoyed it very much, masterful.
Well done.
Sid
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@sidshovel - thanks, it was actually your idea :) took me a couple of days to figure out which angle I wanted to approach it from.. I also like making up words.. solitudement, not really a word. but fit :)
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I tried that word-making trick of yours and it's a lot harder than it seems.
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@sidshovel - in this case I was looking for another word for alone. solitude popped up. I wanted it to rhyme, so I just added 'ment' to the end..
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as you do!
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@sidshovel - seems like you and me are the only one that comments :).. it's funny 27 views. it's almost getting to the point of why post.? it's not like I don't value your opinion, I do. but it seems that nobody gives a crap.
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I don't think serial killers are that smart , most are stupid and losers
Sounds pretty poetic for a serial killer , But sounds great as always with Suno 4
They should kill these guys , instead of making them celebrities
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Funny, I was just toying with the idea of writing a song about these viewers, provisional title:
The deaf, dumb and blind kids.
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@ElvisNash - thanks for the comment.
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@sidshovel - I get it - AI bad but at least have the common courtesy of commenting on the lyrics, you don't have to listen. but then there are those, I really appreciate they don't. my lyrics really not for everyone :)
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You're my favorite poet lol. Can you imagine getting that loser DNA of becoming a serial killer ? Marble falls from the sky , your president , Not you , your a serial killer , killing mostly hookers , More bad DNA
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common courtesy isn't that common Bill!
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at least they are a bit different than most.. most of the lyrics posted are the same, just different names. ironknee, yeahbuddy, the same boring lyrics, just different names. there is no originality to them..
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There's an ongoing thread in General Discussion, "Where have all the followers gone" probably appropriate to transfer discussion to that now!
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@sidshovel - it doesn't really matter at this point. honestly.
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it takes about 3 minutes to go to a song
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@ElvisNash - That's not the point. the issue is this.. i'm guilty of it as well.. I'll only comment on your's, sids and owen's when he posts because your stuff is different. I won't comment on the others because I got tired of listening to geriatric caterwauling behind bad guitar playing over boring lyrics. I know they refuse to comment, because of the fact I use AI to produce the music. although, ironknee might be different, but he got on my nerves, so I blocked him. :)
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It was a cold wintery night when I read the drama on a music forum , as Dr House trys to solve another medical mystery on Peacock channel . As hit after hit , hits the bandwave on the vast internet
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Bill since this is your thread and you are encouraging this debate, I will continue to add my twopenny worth.
I joined this forum over a year ago, at that time, the ratio of viewers to comments was about the same. There was no Ai back then and I only posted lyrics. People were helpful and their comments focused on the work you posted. The divisiveness in the forum came largely with the advent of Ai, one faction of "real musicians" loathed the technology and by extension anyone who used it. The other group, i.e. myself argued in favour of its use. Owen came down in favour of the right to post with conditions.
The die was cast, things got toxic very quickly and have never recovered. We now have even more divisions as Ai was joined by politics, religion and social preferences. Some packed their bags and left, others were helped along with their luggage.
Currently, the atmosphere on the forum is poor, only a handful of regular posters are active. Most just post a song and retreat back into their shells, commenting on just the minimum required.
The forum, in my opinion, needs a reset, I have my own thoughts on what that would look like but for now I'd like to hear what others have in mind.
Sid
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In respect to the number of views / comments. there is another site where at any given time, there are more guest than members. one post in a relatively short time had over 100+ views and 2 comments. But your correct about the AI issue. the one past member, is still taking shots at AI on the other site.. at some point you have to let it go. The politics and social comments were when it really went south. there are a lot of people with a false sense of entitlement. They were given a good solution yet refused to work with the system. that's problematic. One member, not sure what happened, went off the rails rather quickly. things go in cycles. i'm sure some of the lurkers, will feel comfortable at some point to start posting lyrics and songs and this site will pick back up again.
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I don't think this is helpful. Commentating on the behaviour of other members is not likely to generate a better atmosphere or garner you more comments. Remember that no one is obliged to comment on your songs, only to comment on 2 songs for each one they themselves post. I would suggest modelling the behaviour you wish to see. Giving meaningful comments to others on their songs is the best way to encourage others to post on yours. Reciprocity still has weight.
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These are my thoughts, helpful or not. you may not agree. your absolutely correct, they have the option. then why post if nobody comments good or bad? It's the behavior of others that caused this rift. it's the behavior of others that hijacked posts and made political and sociological comments after they were specifically asked not to. I almost quit this site, because I got tired of all the negativity, when it became non-stop. it became toxic. every single post had those types of comments interjected in the posts. This is a fact, not a disparaging comment on others. It got so bad, I actually had to block 3 members.. Two are still blocked. here's where it becomes a circular argument. if I don't like the lyrics or have no opinion on the lyrics, then I won't comment, which is I'm sure what's happening with mine. I was taught that if you had nothing nice to say, then don't say anything. but you have to comment on at least two. In the current situation, there are a select few. As I mentioned above, I won't comment on two members, because from the most part, every single song they posted are boring and not interesting, there is nothing unique. I can't get past the first verse. I grew up on country going all the way back to jim reeves, hank williams, johnny horton, etc.. those are some brilliant lyricist, those grabbed you in the first verse. these are not them. I also understand that my lyrics are not for everybody, as I try to model them after the prog rock /experimental bands that I admire. like King crimson, ELP, Tool, Porcupine Tree and even Slipknot, once you get past the facade, brilliant lyrics. as I mentioned earlier, things go in cycles. I'm sure at some point, there will be more diverse lyrics. And to be honest, I think very few active members actually read my posts. so i'm pretty confident that other than you, sid and elvis my posts fall on deaf ears.. And I think that y'all glossed over these lyrics as I realized that I made a mistake, that nobody seemed to have caught.. I meant to say Pact, not pack, which I need to go back and reword those two lines :). 😂
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Your thoughts are your own. But the only person's behaviour you can change is yourself. And yes, I saw "pack" instead of "pact", but given your propensity to invent words or use them in novel ways I didn't know if that was deliberate or not.
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very true on all accounts.
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I have just finished re-reading How do we make magic happen on TSF? in the General Discussion. Ironically, half the people who offered suggestions have either left or not contributed for months.
Bill's issue is symptomatic of a more general malaise affecting the site. Less people are being attracted to the site and those that are, don't last very long before they move on.
No amount of blaming others or naively adopting a Kumbaya approach to problems is going to solve this.
This site needs to reinvent itself before it becomes no more than a fond memory.
The people shouting the loudest are the ones who are concerned the most.
Sid
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At this juncture all viewpoints have been established, so this matter is really closed. All that is left to do, is to continue to write and post. and I'm resolute at this point, that if only one person looks at my song and either thinks wtf did I just read or, that was a painted story in words. then that's ok. 😂
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[Verse 1]
The black mausoleum door is ancient rust
The cold stone room stale stench and SUCH
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[Verse 1]
The black mausoleum door is ancient rust
The cold stone room stale stench and eeiry touch
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@yeahbuddy , thanks for the suggestions. the eerie touch would go with the door. the black mausoleum door emanates eerie feelings / Flickering torches on walls reflect shadows upon ceiling ..
or something to that affect..
again, thanks for the suggestions, :)
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Well if it was live tracks , and you had connections in the Sync world , it might fit a movie on serial killers . Hollywood loves gloryfing losers and bad DNA
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