Original song - Why is everyone looking at you?

robwills

This song is part of the album "Electric Fields". The first song is "Why is everyone looking at you?". It's a psychological story based in a highly melodic, classically based theme with a chorus of crisp, classic rock power chords finished with a Hendrixian guitar solo :

https://gloriousmagicalfields.bandcamp.com/album/electric-fields

Lyrics:

Did you turn out the lights?

Did you know wrong from right?

Were you the one everybody said

"He won't get nowhere"

Did you past the test?

Did you make a mess?

Were you one that everyone said

"She is not one to believe"

And you hear some sounds

And you turn around

But there's no one there

And you're kind of scared

Then one day you find

It's all in your mind

Did you know where to go?

Listen to the radio

It's beaming voices to your head

How do you feel?

Do you think you're real?

Why is everyone looking at you?

ChrisPrice

A long track. This reminds me in some ways of early Pink Floyd. Syd Barrett era. I'm old enough to remember that stuff! It would be great if you could team up with a drummer and a bass player. The production is still a long way off, but I can tell what you are trying to do. Keep working at it.

sidshovel

There is some nice guitar in the piece, but the rest is WIP. Better qualified than I are giving you sound advice, literally. Focus on that for the moment.

Sid

robwills

Thanks for listening. I know they are not complete songs. I'm going to get the microphone that was recommended in another post and try to do some pieces that are complete,

RainyDayMan

You need a band. Your songs are there, but if you're trying to sell them you need to bring them up a notch. On a commercial basis your competition is way ahead of you. But the songwriting is fine - you bring that to the table. You've got a distinct style and your playing skills are strong.

robwills

I agree. But I think what I will do first is get the good microphone then try to do some pieces that I can do all by myself that sound professional or at least listenable. I will also incorporate with the music into "Le Formule", a formula I discovered in recent recent that brings the ultimate happiness, ecstasy if you will, to many who apply it.

Also, I am going to incorporate my theory of the world social evolution into it as well. This forum is a perfect illustration of the third and final stage of the evolution - people everywhere in the world sharing good information with each other. I know it doesn't appear so right now but the world will have peace, prosperity, health and happiness for everyone in the not so distant future. Music plays an important part, too.