Athila
I wanted to refresh my mind with this story about a modern-day Athila, not bloodthirsty but seductive, cold and without any kind of scruples who does not leave behind dead people but living misfortunes.
Of course
I didn't know how to play Athila, fake beard? mustache? warrior suit? black hair????
I asked one of my sons, who is an actor, for help and he gave me some images of him so I could make the video.. This is the result.
I hope you enjoy this villainous conqueror.
Athila
His smile so seductive
captivated
men and women
but he was like Athila
leaving behind his steps
smoke, ashes and pain
He never got dirty
he was always clean
despite his hand stained
every soul he meet
He was like Ahtila
he arrived
won
and left
estealing the dreams of others
He needed the light of their hopes
like the flowers
need the water
His so brilliant lies
made blind
the eyes of his victims
how to doubt that man
that kissed their hands
with so much passion
He was his own poison
the others were his antidote
he needed the ligt of their hopes
like the flowers need the water
Comments
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I got more and more into this as the song went on.
Really like:
He needed the light of their hopes
like the flowers
need the water
You might consider: despite his hand stained :: still his hand stained (unless you are deliberately playing off "despite" also meaning contempt
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Like RDM, this song grows on you if you give it a chance. The problem is, in this world of instant gratification, many may not give it a chance. Where the vocal range doesn't change much, variation must come from elsewhere, either the music or the visuals. Experiment with building tension into the first minute of a similar song and release it with a sudden vocal, musical and visual climax, maintain that for a minute or so, then release back to the initial range of vocals.
Did enjoy it, the potential for more is there to be exploited.
Sid
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Hola, thank you very much for your comment. This one is not one of my favorites, yes, it's sooo important to be connected with what I sing!!! and this time I wasn't, it has served to refresh my mind, a float in the sea of blockage.
Have a nice day
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So you in this but as mentioned above missing the you in it. I could feel the lack of your emotional connection to the words as I listened. I hope to hear a revised version with your emotional punch you possess.
I concur about the lines RDM pointed out, they were also my favs.
I enjoyed the lyrics and the arc it contains nicely done overall. Oh, cool video too
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Gracias!!
There are few songs that I have remade, I think that I share steps that add up to form an evolution.
When I listen to previous songs I enjoy knowing that, good or bad, they are my path, a reality, an anchor that holds me when I fly away, my mind is very scattered, many things at once.
Gracis por tu tiempo @prysmatyk
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@MoraAmaroLaLoba You selected a cool theme for your original song, Mora! The bass and synth blend well to create a dark, ominous vibe, while the percussion and guitar inject enough pop-sensibility to keep the track radio-friendly. The song is well crafted with a clear, polished mix. Your vocals are excellent as always, and your lyrics tell your story in such a compelling way. The video is trendy as well. I enjoyed listening and look forward to your next track. Well done! 😀
Cheers,
Joseph
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Gracias @icystorm
It's a topic that I didn't know how to approach, so I turned it into a tyrant of love and fraud, and I think the lyrics are descriptive enough
Stay well!
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Hola Nick, gracias!!!
I am a bit chaotic but generally I begin with lyrics but sometimes there is an image, a phrase, something external that provokes the story, other times I begin doing the music without knowing what will happen then.... everything is difficult, you know by yourself!!!
Glad to see you @NickRyder
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