What was I born for ?
I sit on the fence,looking out at nowhere
thinking about that place
and if it , -really exists
and if I'll ever find it
Chorus
what was I born for ?
what did the Lord, have in mind - for me ?
at the moment, I'm blinded
stumbling along, without able to find
Chewing on a piece of grasssss
in the distance , I hear children laughhh
nothing to seems, to have gone to plan
I don't understand, what's gone wrong
Chorus
what was I born for ?
what did the Lord, have in mind-for me ?
does he, still have plans for me ?
waiting for my big bang moment
all my friends from school
have flown the nest, and left
why doesn't he answer me ?
and let me know my journey
Chorus
what was I born for ?
what did the Lord, have in mind-for me ?
does he, still hear my prayers ?
or have, I been forgotten ?
the sun warms my face
and the wind, flicks the hem on my dress
my heart lifts, I'm not alone
his voice has spoken
Chorus
what was I born for ?
what did the Lord, have in mind-for me ?
he is with me, that's all I need to know
I sit on the fence, whatever I see
God, is there already
Comments
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Overall, I like the progression of the story: from sitting on a fence wondering to finding an answer. That feels complete.
I like opening with "sit on the fence" as it provides a physical context, and implies a spiritual one as well.
thinking about that place
That line is ambiguous. I'm guessing it refers to heaven, but it's unclear. Personally I would prefer it to be explicit as the song hasn't gotten far enough at that point to even guess what it means. But not a showstopper.
A gust of wind feels a little thin for a sudden revelation, but then I've never had one! Perhaps it's based on a real event for you. And when sung it probably won't matter. I'm probably reading too much into it.
Personally I prefer songs to rhyme, but there are plenty that don't, and no reason this one should.
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Thanks for the feedback, I shall have a look at it again
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I'm a bit stuck on this one, leaving it here if anyone wants to take in on
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How about this?
Verse:
Sitting on a fence
I can hear children laugh
Sounds of innocence
Chewing on a piece of grass
And I wonder
Chorus:
What was I born for?
What did the Lord
Have in mind for me?
Waiting for revelation
To fall down on me
Like victory
Verse:
Friends all flown the nest
Big plans and promises
Only me left
Staring into emptiness
And I wonder
What was I born for?
What did the Lord
Have in mind for me?
Waiting for revelation
To inspire me
Like a symphony
Bridge:
the sun warms my face
and the wind flicks up
the hem on my dress
I'm not alone
I'm in his grace
my heart swells
his voice has spoken
I'm not alone
Chorus
what was I born for ?
what did the Lord,
have in mind-for me ?
he is with me,
that's all I need to know
Sitting on a fence
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Yes, I like it. I started but got stuck, glad that you could do something with it .
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What were you born for Katie ? Maybe add that in scenrio
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What I mean Katie , is give storys in verses what you were meant to do in life
example. ...Grace the stage as a ballet dancer
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Thank you, I will think about that
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A collaboration between myself and Owen, even though Owen did most of the work. I suggested a psychedelic vibe. I'm really pleased with it. It's different.. I wanted it to be Beatley, but I think that we've got something interesting.
Waiting For Revelation
Verse:
Sitting on a fence
I can hear children laugh
Sounds of innocence
Chewing on a piece of glass
And I wonder
Chorus:
What was I born for?
What did the Lord
Have in mind for me?
Waiting for revelation
To rain down on me
Like victory
Verse:
Friends all flown the nest
Big plans and promises
Only me left
Staring into emptiness
And I wonder
What was I born for?
What did the Lord
Have in mind for me?
Waiting for revelation
To wash over me
Like a symphony
Bridge:
the sun warms my face
and the wind flicks up
the hem of my dress
I'm not alone
I'm in his grace
my heart swells
his voice has spoken
I'm not alone
chorus
what was I born for ?
what did the Lord,
have in mind-for me ?
he is with me,
that's all I need to know
Sitting on a fence
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Thanks for giving me so much latitude with this one, Katie. I moved the dial on it quite a bit, so appreciate your willingness to see where that my lead, and glad that you are happy with the result!
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I really l like it, I think you've made a really good job of it x
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Well done,
I have to be honest and say that when I read the lyrics, I could feel the angst but not the anguish.
The finished article was a complete transformation, lovely music well sung, I loved it.
Kudos to both of you for spotting a diamond and staying behind to polish it.
C'mon you musicians/singers, grab some of these lyrics and strut your stuff.
Sid
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Thanks Sid, as I said before it was Owen who made itv happen.
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A great collaboration! Thanks for sharing. I really like the vibe that Owen went with on this. I really like the key change toward the end. This is a great rewrite of the lyric.
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Thanks guys! For me this is one where the whole is greater than the sum of its parts.
I would never have come up with this song - the theme and core lyrics are all Katie's, but I'm glad to have helped shape it.
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Great collaboration. Lyrics we all can relate to at some point in our lives.0
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