The Crossroads of Life
I’m bitter the quitter in me
Just won’t give up
My sober is over and I’m back
To getting drunk
All the one night stands I had
Took a toll on my soul
And it’s hell knowing Heaven is not
Where I’m gonna go
Here I am again
At the crossroads of life
Making deals with the devil in spite of
Knowing wrong from right
What lingers are memories of when
Love wasn’t a lie
Now here I am again at
The crossroads of life
When I sold my soul I thought
I’d get a receipt
Can’t ask for a refund though misery
Plays on repeat
Seems the longer I’m sober
The colder the shoulder becomes
I bought what was sold by selling my soul
Now it seems that my life is done
Here I am again
At the crossroads of life
Making deals with the devil in spite of
Knowing wrong from right
What lingers are memories of when
Love wasn’t a lie
Now here I am again at
The crossroads of life
I tried to repent
But I walked and than ran
Back to the crossroads of life
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It's a good one Mike. That chorus in particular reads very smoothly, I can almost hear the music there.
Love these lines
Making deals with the devil in spite of
Knowing wrong from right
What lingers are memories of when
Love wasn’t a lie
I like those internal rhymes like bitter / quitter too
And these lines set up the song really well:
My sober is over and I’m back
To getting drunk
A couple of minor things:
I think "receipt" might be an awkward word to sing. Maybe "release"?
"Now it seems that my life is done" that feels like too many syllables compared to prev lines in the same spot.
In the outro, it might work well if the 1st and 2nd lines rhymed. But the only thing I could come up with was:
I tried to take a stand
but I'm not sure that's better than what you already have!
Good stuff.
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Glad you're here Mike. These are nice lyrics. No promises, but I'll mull over your words..you never know, I might be able to come up with some music...if you'll let me of course!!😀
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Thanks Owen! I kind of based the whole idea off of the first line. I actually thought of changing it all together and making the first line the first line of the chorus. Appreciate the ideas. I’ve lost my inspiration for this stuff, and it doesn’t come nearly as easily as it once did, but I’m trying to put together some stuff here and there. Thanks for looking!0
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Chris, I must have been typing while your comment came across, and I missed it. Thanks, not sure how long I’ll be back this time, but have at it, if you’d like! Glad to be back if only for a little while. I’m not a musician/lyricist like the rest of you. Just a dad trying to work some ideas in hoping to maybe someday get a good one.0
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