Holes

IronKnee

This is an AI production that adheres to the original in a covered work. This is a cover of an existing song that closely follows the original's melody, lyrics, and structure. It maintains the core elements and essence of the original work while adding a high production value and, in some instances, various instrumentations. Above all, as the author of this song, I want to make clear that this production respects the original composition entirely.

This may be a bit personal, but maybe some could relate. it's about temptation, sin, guilt and the struggles with overcoming the wretchedness within 😀Sound like fun... Tell me what you think?

“Holes"

Words & Music By Tom Tognaci

https://soundclick.com/song/15236516

Ohio’s surely something in the early Autumn rain

There’s a truth in this quiet, beautiful refrain    

But as my mind a ‘wanders through the splendor and the grace

There’s a darker truth, deep inside, I must face

 

… And there, I’ll stumble and fall   

I’m always pulled by the guilt, picking at my craw  

And to my great shame in it all

Pride digs a hole in me that no bottle can fill  

And it’s over myself I fall 

….in my own holes 

 

It’s a slow walk to Heaven on the detours that I take     

I can’t bear this old cross not even for my sake              

‘Cause no man’s cross is carried when he’s leaning on a crutch   

All it ever takes is just one little touch… 

 

… And there, I’ll stumble and fall   

I’m always pulled by the guilt, picking at my craw  

And to my great shame in it all

Pride digs a hole in me that no bottle can fill  

And it’s over myself I fall 

….in my own holes 

 Oh Lord, how I’ve tried changing from the inside.     

I’ve taken it day by day, but where did all the time go?         

Oh, Lord, keep me strong, when I cannot go on.     

I’ve yet to hit the rock, that keeps me from that deeper hole.         

 

 Ohio’s surely something in the early Autumn rain

There’s a truth in this quiet, beautiful refrain

RainyDayMan

Your signature guitar style and melodies are all over this!

It's a reflective, honest song without feeling self-indulgent.

You might try a tiny pause after the 2nd line in each verse, just a bar to hold it a touch. Except maybe the last where the dynamic lifts.

It’s a slow walk to Heaven on the detours that I take  

I like that line! Says a lot - the destination, and the problems getting there!

I enjoyed that. I think a lot of people will.

IronKnee

https://www.thesongwritersforum.com/vanilla/discussion/comment/20390#Comment_20390

Thanks, Rainy... For me, the most important line is: "No man's cross is carried, when he's leaning on a crutch".

That was the idea that bore this song. "The crutch" pulls our attentions, leads us astray. It's step ONE in getting things straight 😎

I'm glad you liked it... I can only hope others will find something in there, as well.