Alice in Wonderland
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lyrics SS : music/vocals Ai
Dedicated to those who provide care to those they love but can only watch and wait.
[verse 1]
Livin' down a rabbit hole,
don't see the light of day.
Reality's not what it seems,
it can be whatever she says.
[verse 2]
Everythin', seems true to Alice,
in this other parallel universe.
A world, moulded to her needs,
by a brain that doesn't work.
[chorus]
Alice lives in her own world,
protected from the real one.
Hers exists within the mind,
the one she knew has gone.
[verse 3]
Loved ones turn to strangers,
as nature destroys the brain.
Basic functions to survive,
seem to be, all that remain.
[chorus]
Alice lives in her own world,
protected from the real one.
Hers exists within the mind,
the one she knew, has gone.
[bridge]
Family members are torn apart,
lifetime of love, lost somewhere.
the distance breaks your heart,
are there embers still left in there.
[final chorus]
Alice lives in her own world,
protected from the real one.
Hers exists within the mind,
the one she knew, has gone.
[outro]
Alice sits down to eat her meal,
it's all bein' done on autopilot.
Eyes gaze on another world,
wonder how long she's got.
Comments
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Well that's a heartbreaker! I like how you're using Alice in Wonderful here. Strong lyric. And sadly, true for some people.
Not sure what level of control you can get over dynamics using AI, but I feel like this could benefit from a slow build up at the start to an all out wail by the end, rather than staying slow and sad.
Good lyric!
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You're right, I remember listening to this thinking it's a bit one-paced but by then something else had popped into my head and I went back to writing the next song. As you know, my interests and inclination lie in the lyrics and the story, not the music or Ai, often it tends to show. At the moment, and probably for the near future, when it comes to music and vocals, near enough will probably have to be good enough.
Your comments aren't wasted though, everything you suggest is noted and taken on board.
Thanks again for your time and effort.
Sid
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@sidshovel - somber lyrics. I had to read it a couple of times to get the gist.
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The lyrics are tight, I love the mood of the music: haunting, sad, and fitting. I really enjoyed this.
Well done Sid!
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Thanks guys, appreciate the comments, sorry if it left anyone a bit down, Seeing someone you've loved for decades not recognise you is heartbreaking. Couldn't think of any other way to convey the sadness and loss.
Sid
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Nice, sad song. I agree with Owen that it would benefit a bit from a little more variation, either in a greater contrast between verse and chorus or a build in intensity.
Using Alice in Wonderland is a great idea, hinting at the "second childhood" aspect of her situation.
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Thanks Gavin, appreciate the feedback. agree with yours and RDM's comments re dynamics. Strangely, Ai usually follows the labelled sections and bases the dynamics on those, for some reason it didn't.
Valued opinion as always,
thanks,
Sid
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