My New song ...lost and found
Your git .and things start to pas by
.good and bad and sad . This about
If you don.t give a hand .if friend
Needs one .jane was her name .
She came around in need .i didn't
Reply .i have to check it course my
Spelling go.s wrong sometimes.so tomorrow.i'll up it on
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I'm a bit lost here. Is that the lyric to the song you've posted or a comment about it?
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I like the title. Hope you post it soon :)
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Still working on it .it can still change
Nothing new under the sun
A smoking trail where i had gone
As i walk my way up to boothill
Everything is stuck and still
Every stone i.ve turned found the road was burned
Chorus
I gues it's the the road to hell
I know to far and just to well
Every time i'm going down
Going past the lost and found
Jane came to my door
Said my soul is sad and sore
Well everything is stuck and still My friends al on boothill
We whent for sheap trills
Drinking booze and taking pills
I gues it's the road to hell
I didn.t know jane so well
Course the other night i went down
Found her hanging 6 inch of the ground
The Words of the past carfed in stone now stands above her bones
I wish she was still around
My Tairs roll whitout sound
So there.s nothing new under the sun .just a smoking trail where we had gone
As i walk my way up to boothill
All the blackbirds stay still
Every stone my boot turns
Echo.s like a fire burns
At night i sit in the dark
Thinking about the hurt i've done and coursed
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Made a temp recording from it
But i don.t like vibe jet0 -
its pretty dark , you're hitting a western theme with boot hill and boots , i don't think pills were arround back then
What exactly is lost and found ? You lost her I get that , Buts whats found ?
you would have to know Jane for awhile to get this dark I'm walking up boot hill emotion
ok Jane hung herself beacause of You ? Or whiskey and pills
looks like you both went for cheap thrills with whiskey and pills but she hung herself
Whats exaclty is found , thats you're hook ?
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I'll give you a hook, its Raining Whiskey Bottles
Lost and found hook has been done many times
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Thanks for the comment.elvisnash. i'm still working on it . it's not carfed in stone.it's one of these songs .that ceeps twisting.
I rewrote it few times.mayby put it aside
For a while.i whant it to have a johnny cash style song. the chorus works for that part .the riffs are right.but the rest .......i think wont. So i'll see what i find.
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Maybe you can have a happy ending ,
It seems everyone wants to stay in a dark place I've noticed on songwriting forums on songs
I rarely hear a upbeat song
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You know people do die in modern country songs
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I like how this is taking shape. It's dark, but the emotion is powerful, which I like. I would like to know more about who 'Jane' is. She just kind of shows up at his door. I would like to connect with the relationship between this person and Jane. I really like this line, "The Words of the past carved in stone now stands above her bones".
I suggest cleaning up the typos so it reads a bit smoother :)
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No happy ending elvis. liked two black
Cadillacs .thanks for your comment elvis and andrea i'm gonna rewrite the song
It's more like sketch now .the ruff idea
Of where it has to go.booze and pills
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ha ha no happy ending , kinda like life , You can leave the pills , I'm just thinking Westerns , I think Doc Holiday did pills
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“Doc” Holliday lived until age 36, some 14 years longer than he was predicted to live. His major medicinal treatments were alcohol and opium
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The dice and the guns weren’t the only things loaded in the Old West — so were many men and women. Generally, when we think of people being “loaded” in those days, the image of men standing at a long bar knocking down shots of Firewater or White Lightning immediately comes to mind. However, the fact is that drugs such as morphine and cocaine were being used with frequency. These, along with cannabis (marijuana), heroin, and other narcotics, were legal, could be purchased over the counter, and were liberally prescribed by doctors for many ailments
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So on some reasearch Cowboys took drugs
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I'm.dutch but i now the story of doc
He went around doors .they change the law. And he was cought.
Our dutch warehouses in sixteenhunderd where full of spices
(Opuim.and. cocaine) and some stuff
To make the food more tasty.0 -
Oh I bet it made it more tasty high on drugs
Nothing has changed in 2023 really And were still saying peace on earth , which will never happen
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Peace a very strong word often been sad never been heard0
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Jesus was a cowboy , This world will spin evil till it ends , Which should have been about World War 2 , But no
thats a lesson on 2 black caddialcs , A male artist counld never get away with killing a women in country music , its fine on murder of a man over sex in a country song
Carrie is always coming off she hates men
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Most professional songwriters will agree on at least one thing , give them a upbeat poistive song , That rule hasn't changed in 15 years
Not that all songs are on radio , Some are really depprssing . But some are so well wriiten we love them , Spending years to study the craft of a songsmith . Studying hits and why the work, End less hours on rewrites
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almost everything has already been written or sung.
that won't spoil my fun. You can even give a cover your own sound. It's also about who sings it and how. I don't really care about the science behind a hit. Life doesn't have a fixed pattern either.
the past three years
that I play guitar again.
took me further than I thought.it's more like therapy for me .6 years after my addiction .i know what it's like .and what it shouldn't be.
So the song wil be oke in the end
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almost everything has already been written or sung.. Has it ? , I'm thinking some angles have not been done
Take this hit for instance , People thought it was about lesbians, Complete diffrent angle thats not been done
Its not about lesbians, Shes wishing she was the GF on her old BF, So its a lesson on doing something never done , Thats why it was song of the year . its still being banned on bible belt radio staions , Harry Styles also stole they're hook and made it a diifrent song .
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that's so elvis .but it's not easy to find something innovative.
or to tell .i always see a song as a story.so it often ends up in the same things.love hate loss murder.the day nothing happened
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it is interesting on doing something never done before , Not easy
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ReWrote this today
Car to old... have to see about the 3e verse not right jet
I think it.s rocking billy style0 -
I would check grammar on being conversational, Usually if you don 't talk in a certain manner you won 't write a song that way either
Maybe English is not your first languge
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Oke i check it ...ohw it's
Really bad. sorry for this FU.english
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You're driving a car to old , Though country music is always slammed for bad grammar , Its not really bad grammar on 95% of them , If you read their lyrics . They use slang , but used with correct grammar , If you study hits lyrics u can see how they lay them out.
FLD on a car song , V C. Most hits are with a swagger to them , They're also dancing in and out of pronouns , Talking to her and the listener. 99% of country songs they're never married , its to attract 22 year olds , Hey he's singing to me
Baby you're a song
You make me wanna roll my windows down and cruise
Yeah, when I first saw that bikini top on her
She's poppin' right out of the South Georgia water
Thought, "Oh, good Lord, she had them long tanned legs"
Couldn't help myself so I walked up and said
Baby you're a song
You make me wanna roll my windows down and cruise
Down a back road blowin' stop signs through the middle
Every little farm town with you
In this brand new Chevy with a lift kit
Would look a hell lot better with you up in it
So baby you're a song
You make me wanna roll my windows down and cruise
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Instead of buying a grammar book , You can learn from hit lyrics , For the most part they're conversational
I hear ya Thier, There ,They're, is confusing , You're, Your , alot of the Engish language is confusing
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in Dutch we sometimes have three words for the same thing. I just have to check it with a translator. before I put it on. sorry for that elvis.
it will be fine.eventually1
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