Georgia born an' bred
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lyrics SS : music/vocals Ai
[verse 1]
Good to hear, that accent again,
few Southerners in Tallinn, Estonia.
Embassy people, most Northeast,
Two from Texas, were the closest.
[verse 2]
My whole life spent in Wrightsville,
Atlanta's way too big for me.
Know most people, by their first name,
them people, pretty much do the same.
[chorus]
The scent, of magnolias in the morning,
a songbird, the Cardinal's, in my head.
Through my window, day is dawnin',
glad I'm a Georgian, born an' bred.
[verse 3]
Somethin' about, a Southern town,
is different, from all the rest.
People, have the time for you,
not like, them city folks do.
[verse 4]
Gave up, my government job,
been around the world, an' back.
Gonna move, to my hometown,
the fun of travellin's, overblown.
[chorus]
The scent, of magnolias in the morning,
a songbird, the Cardinal's, in my head.
Through my window, day is dawnin',
glad I'm a Georgian, born an' bred.
[bridge]
Outside, magnolia's everywhere,
colours, assault my senses.
smell of citrus, whites, blues an' red,
beauty that's Georgian, born an' bred.
[outro]
The scent, of magnolias in the morning,
a songbird, the Cardinal's, in my head.
Through my window, day is dawnin',
glad I'm a Georgian, born an' bred.
Comments
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I love your songs because they always tell a story and bring out emotions and are relatable.
Beautifully done for all the Georgians. I was 'almost' a Georgian.
Well written and perfect melody for the lyrics.
I always look forward to your songs.
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Great song, except you are rhymes are a bit off. close rhymes, I guess. but the sentiment is there, that's what I say. as long they quasi understand what i'm saying, it's all good. :)
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@TammyB, @bhengen, Thank you for taking the time to listen and comment, appreciated.
Close rhymes, yes, starting to experiment with the use of more close rhymes rather than standard "perfect rhymes."
Since the majority of my songs take on a more narrative feel, I find "perfect rhymes" tend towards an "artificial" construct of the flow and become a bit restrictive. May be blowin' smoke, but I'll play with it and see where it goes.
Value your input as always, thank you,
Sid
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For me the song really hits it straps in the chorus, and at Verse 3. I think the Embassy verses are too far removed from most people's everyday experience to resonate. I would ditch those and start with what is currently V3. The accent is a useful thing to comment on, and if you want to start there, maybe more of a Good to hear, that accent again, I'm back where I belong vibe.
I think near rhymes are usually fine for the reasons you gave. No problem there for me.
Like it overall.
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Very good point, taken on board, good sound advice as usual, appreciated.
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The sound of the voice, take away the words, just the sounds alone are a testament to longing, for home for friends, for family. Tender and irresistable.
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I'm glad to know that you are experimenting with close rhymes rather than standard ones. I try to move away from "perfect rhymes." I always feel as though they are forced.
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Great song Sid. Love this song! Being raised in a small southern town in North Alabama, I can surely relate.
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Thanks Toney, I envy you. Spent my whole life in big cities, currently writing this from one of 16 million! Absolutely hate them, but somehow I seem to get stuck in them. One day. I'll find myself a small town and stay there.
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