Bird (original acoustic guitar/vocals)
I just self released an album and here's song off of it called Bird. I originally had more instrumentation on it but felt it worked most effectively with just the guitar and vocals.
I wrote it when I was struggling with my watching my son get older and trying to let go and let him live his own life while knowing how cruel the world can be.
Would love for anyone to listen and give feedback if you want
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Lovely finger picking. Be a shame to drown that in other instruments. It certainly doesn't feel like it needs anything else to me.
I like the vocal melody and the way you sing it. Some lovely long notes in there really lends itself to emotion.
Just a thought, but where you sing: I'm a fool, I'm a fool
it might work to sing: I'm a fool, I was a bird too
Very good stuff!
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Lovely vocal work and finger picking. I really enjoy the direction you take your melody, especially in the chorus. Your lyrical imagery is quite relaxing.
😀John B
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Fabulous acoustic guitar picking and a really soulful voice - great falsetto. Yeah, this is fine as it is - nothing else is needed.😀
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Beautiful guitar, beautiful singing, beautiful melody. OMG, I love it.
Nice lyrics, wish you would post them.
Good idea to compare an adult child to a bird leaving the nest.
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I agree with everyone else here. Really nice picking, a soulful delivery, meaningful lyrics. A lot to like here. Thanks for sharing this.
Good luck with the album!
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Hi @brucetangmusic
Beautiful guitar playing as has been noted. You captured it incredibly well in recording - it sounds like you’re sat right in front of me. A passionate, soulful voice delivers an evocative lyric with aplomb.
Top work.
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Thanks everyone! Falsetto is very tough for me so I'm glad it came across ok.
@Songbird52 here are the lyrics:
Verse 1
My little bird
Your wings have opened up
But I'm having trouble letting you go
All that is left is a sad, little broken nest
I will mend it as best as I can
But I know what's to come
They'll tear you to shreds my son
I'd rather you run but I'm an old fool
Chorus
I'm a fool (repeated a few times)
Verse 2
Don't let them in
This world is not your friend
I'd rather you fly and pretend
And hold on to the good
But I know what's to come
They'll tear you to shreds my son
I'd rather you run but I'm an old fool
Chorus
I'm a fool (repeated a few times)
My lyrics are usually much more abstract than in this song. It's difficult for me to write like this so I really appreciate all the feedback
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I am in this same position. My son is aching to leave and become independent, but it is scary. Your lyrics capture this very well, and the music and vocals are sublime. I can feel the emotion in your delivery.
To offer some critique,
'They'll tear you to shreds my son
I'd rather you run but I'm an old fool'
You use this in both V1 and V2. It feel like it should say 'I'd rather you fly'. The word 'run' doesn't fit right. It feels like it is there just to rhyme.
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Really enjoyable listen. Your vocals are outstanding, and the recording has a real intimacy to it.1
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Nice acoustic guitar work, good vocals, and cool lyrics. The production sounds crisp and clear to my ears. I enjoyed listening. Nice work! 😀
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This song has a special atmosphere, your voice gives this color to the general sound!! Very beautiful song!!
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Really good vocal work and an inspiring song. Your voice shows a deep caring for family - lovely and melodic.
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