THIS OL' GUITAR

HummerWisdom

This ain't no John Denver and I didn't realize I stole his title til after I wrote it. Any feedback is greatly appreciated on this rather wordy lyric. Thank you and write on 'cuz it seems all we truly have left of free speech is poetic license. Much love from the USA! Renee

THIS OL’ GUITAR

[Verse 1]

Well, I got this ol’ guitar I’m still learnin’ how to play

I must be a slow learner ‘cuz my hair is goin’ gray

But the more I pluck her strings the sweeter she sounds

I’m findin’ it hard these days to put this pride an’ joy down

 

[Chorus]

This ol’ guitar ‘a mine I wouldn’t trade for a big bar ‘a gold

Her tunin’ keys are tarnished but she’s a humdinger to hold

And with a new set ‘a strings and some tender love an’ care

There’s no better bosom-buddy can be found anywhere

 

[Verse 2]

And this ol’ guitar ‘a mine dreams of Nashville, Tennessee

Open Mic at The Bluebird Café we’ll get there eventually

‘Cuz with three-chords-and-the-truth there’s no way you can lose

And the truth is she’s the heart an’ soul of my love-gone-wrong blues

 

[Chorus]

This ol’ guitar ‘a mine I wouldn’t trade for a big bar ‘a gold

Her tunin’ keys are tarnished but she’s a humdinger to hold

And with a new set ‘a strings and some tender love an’ care

There’s no better bosom-buddy can be found anywhere

 

[Instrumental]

 

[Verse 3/Tag]

So, dust off that ol’ guitar let ‘er show you how she sings

Strum a chord or two and let ‘er tug at your heartstrings

Show her how much you love her and she’ll show you lots ‘a things

Might even write a song together for all the world to sing

Yes, you might even write a song together for all the world to sing, mm-mmm..

 

© 2024 Renee La Chapelle – All Rights Reserved

sidshovel

lovely song Renee,

Expressed yourself very well in the lyrics. Your guitar becomes almost a partner in your quest for fame and greatness on the road to Nashville.

One tip: the rhyming scheme, try to vary the scheme between verse and chorus. This adds a degree of variation and stops the brain from tuning out, especially with long wordy ones!

Thanks for sharing, enjoyed that.

Sid

RainyDayMan

Nice! Straightforward lyric, and nothing wrong with that!

Not sure out "humdinger", maybe "beauty"? though it's not as memorable.

I can imagine this going down well at an Open Mic, not commercial, but easy listening.

HummerWisdom

Thank you so much, Sid and RainyDayMan for your honest feedback. Very helpful and means a lot to me. Write on....

Renee