Mirror
Hey there,
Not the best stuff I ever wrote, but let’s say it’s one of the most therapeutic ones for me.
Like usual open for comments and ideas. Tyvm!
MiRrOr
Why didn’t you say it. A‘
But did. this to my soul
Why wasn’t I able
To reach you with my call
Have you been to busy
Didn’t you want to hear
Did you ever notice
That you’ve built up a wall
No hug, not a good word. A+
Nothing I can recall
Not even that you’re proud
Of what I have become
You Echo within me
Spinnin‘ inside my soul
While I tried to reach you
So much in me turned numb
When I look in a mirror. B
I see your face in mine
When I look in a mirror
There’s something I don’t want to see
When I look in a mirror
I see your face in mine
And I always feel this urge
And I can’t really be
Will you ever show me some love
Then I won’t break the mirror
But will be able to break free
Let’s listen to each other. C
Let’s work on this day by day
Let’s listen to each other
Try to understand what each one has to say
Let’s listen to each h other
Before our final day
Together we should pave our way
Why didn’t you say it. A*
Not even when I fell
Unable to get up
-on my own by my own strength-
And free myself from hell
©️by Ian P./ 09.02.2023/ for: VALENTINE+B
Not the best stuff I ever wrote, but let’s say it’s one of the most therapeutic ones for me.
Like usual open for comments and ideas. Tyvm!
MiRrOr
Why didn’t you say it. A‘
But did. this to my soul
Why wasn’t I able
To reach you with my call
Have you been to busy
Didn’t you want to hear
Did you ever notice
That you’ve built up a wall
No hug, not a good word. A+
Nothing I can recall
Not even that you’re proud
Of what I have become
You Echo within me
Spinnin‘ inside my soul
While I tried to reach you
So much in me turned numb
When I look in a mirror. B
I see your face in mine
When I look in a mirror
There’s something I don’t want to see
When I look in a mirror
I see your face in mine
And I always feel this urge
And I can’t really be
Will you ever show me some love
Then I won’t break the mirror
But will be able to break free
Let’s listen to each other. C
Let’s work on this day by day
Let’s listen to each other
Try to understand what each one has to say
Let’s listen to each h other
Before our final day
Together we should pave our way
Why didn’t you say it. A*
Not even when I fell
Unable to get up
-on my own by my own strength-
And free myself from hell
©️by Ian P./ 09.02.2023/ for: VALENTINE+B
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Comments
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I think it's a different type of song rather than being worse, Ian
I get a much heavier, rockier kind of vibe coming through. I think it's from the rhythm of the lyric. Shorter phrases.
There's less poetic imagery in this song, but the more conversational style would also work in a rock genre.
I like it. I think you've done well here 😀
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Tyvm owen! It was kinda hard to write it while still in hospital, but it was kind of a task „write it down!“ by one of my doctors. I’m happy if it’s not half bad 😅
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