Wake Up
Wake Up
© 2024 Owen Hovenden
https://soundcloud.com/rainydayman/wake-up
Verse 1
Wake up, open up your eyes,
You've been hiding, feeding on your own lies.
Blindfold on, hands tied tight,
Drowning in the dark, afraid of light.
Chorus:
Wake up, you're wasting time,
Bound to the shadows within your mind.
Feel the weight, as it drags you down
Can you break free? Will you drown?
Verse 2
So close, but you’re so far gone,
Trapped in the webs that you spun alone.
Ghosts of dreams you tried to hide,
Haunt you now, so cold and tired
Chorus
Bridge:
You can scream, but no one hears,
Walls of silence built on fear.
When you fall, can you stand tall?
Don’t let the darkness seal your fate.
Face in the mirror is still the same
Raise your eyes, to the light
Or are you lost to it all?
Chorus
Comments
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A real mixed bag here RDM. I absolutely loved the music, excluding the bridge. It was different and innovative and really well played. The bridge had too much contrast in style to the rest and didn't work that well. As to the lyrics, too obscure for my literal taste, maybe most get it, for my storytelling style it was too psychological for me. An unusual change in direction for you!
The music certainly made up for what I didn't get, it was fantastic, so different!
Sid
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Uff… that’s a different one!
I do like the lyrics and especially the questions you put in there. It showed how ppl waist their lifes and happiness because they need to hold on to their self webbed net of lies and self-Defence.
I’m not sure if:
Verse 2
So close, but you’re so far gone
<< the ‚you‘re‘ is needed, I would keep it short here, specially because you’re is used very often in this piece.
I like the music, a bit psychedelic but not to much, but I’d let the voice come out more clear and clean, like a voice of wisdom trying to break through to the other person.
the bridge…yes the change is a bit strange but that’s a mark in the song. I’d try it a bit faster and bounce back on the last line. A bit more intense feeling for the recipients.
Hope I could have been helpful!
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Love the lead guitar in the background, fits real tight with the acoustic. Are you playing those? The bridge is nicely done works perfectly with the song. Ok, I'm awake.
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What wonderful lyric!!! Really deep en moving. I like the general sound, guitars sound good and sounds in the back, subtle but giving color, wraps ears so well!!
The change at 2'40 approx. surprised me, maybe you could soften it, announcing it a little earlier with some new rhythm? Well, you know, it's all personal ideas. How beautiful, sad but bright, like life
Glad to hear your new song, I missed your new one!
See you @RainyDayMan
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Thanks everyone for listening and for your comments and suggestions!
@sidshovel I think you hit all the highlights there Sid! Yes, the lyric is obscure and open to interpretation. That's what I was going for, it's certainly not a story driven lyric, but I got what I aimed for. The bridge is a really strong contrast and arrives abruptly. I think people are either going to love that or hate it. I'm happy with it personally, but it doesn't shock me that it doesn't work for you! Glad you enjoyed the rest of the music though. And the whole thing was definitely an experiment. I was listening to some Alice in Chains and inspired to try a new direction. I don't think it sounds like them, but I was able to capture the sound in my head, so it's a success in that regard.
@RainbowKeeper You might be right about that "you're" RK. I'll play it a few times either way and hear how it sounds. I probably won't re-record just for that, but it might change the way I play it going forwards. Sounds like the bridge didn't work for you either. 😀
@StoneFlowers Thanks for that! Yes, I'm playing guitar, lead guitar and bass here. I'm not a natural lead player though, so it's all short phrases overdubbed in. Glad you liked the bridge, that's at least two of us!
@MoraAmaroLaLoba Thanks Mora! It's not my usual style of lyric, but I think it fits this song. And as you said, the general mood and color play a big role here.
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@RainyDayMan This song seems to cover new ground for you, Owen. The lyrics, chord changes, and melody work well. Good job!
Cheers,
Joseph
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True dat! Thanks Joseph!
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As I said, I just love the music and I keep hearing songs like "Wild Horses" RS working with this style.
Why don't you try covering that with this music, I really think it would be knockout!
Sid
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Not big into covers Sid. Why listen to me when you can hear the original? Wild Horses is a good song of course.
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Fair comment, and that's usually the case, It was once my thoughts till I heard Joe Cocker sing, "With a little help from my friends", blew me away!
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I still like the bridge but personally I’d like it faster. Dunno way maybe include a tongue twister but yep. Would change it even more I guess….🤔0
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Thanks for the clarification RK! I don't think I'll go down that route, but it's interesting to hear how other people approach things.
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The most unusual song I've heard from you yet Owen. Great lyrics and vocals. If I'm honest it took me a couple of listens to get into the feel of this one, but I love it. Some nice guitar playing too.
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Thanks Chris! Nice to know I still have some surprises left in me! And welcome back 😀
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Hi Owen,
I heard this on SC and really liked the feel of the song. I had to come by to read the lyrics :)
The music gives me a deep emotional vibe, which fit the lyrics very well. The melodies are super. It was a very enjoyable listen!
I enjoy psychological themes. The visuals are strong which helps me connect with what this character is going through. I do like the theme, but it feels a bit dire. I wish there was a little more hope to be found.
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Thanks Andrea, some thoughtful comments there. Yes it does fall on the bleak side of things! Hope you are doing well!
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As with Andrea, I think the lyrics and music go together really well to create a nice mood. Even though the words are a bit down, the feel is quite relaxing. The bridge is a bit of a jolt, but I think I got it after the second time through. Drums maybe might have helped there, but it works as-is as far as I'm concerned. Nicely done (and good guitar work)!
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@Andrea I'm happy to see your post here, Andrea! You were sorely missed! Please share your cool songs here for everyone to enjoy! 😀
Cheers,
Joseph
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I found this song to be incredibly interesting in its musicality. Instrumentation was fascinating. Slightly melancholic, but also whimsical in a certain way. Were your vocals doubled? I really enjoyed it.
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@highvibrational No, the vocals weren't doubled, but there is a good amount of reverb on them. Glad you enjoyed it 😀
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