Ring
Song two for today, sorry but I have too.
Written on a bus on my way back from Europa capital Brussels.
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And with those songs volume 4 of my songbooks is fulfilled! No. 5 is already waiting for input.
Ring
While I have been walking around. A‘
I found a little special thing
And my thoughts started to fly high
Thinking about this silver ring
Who has lost you on the wet ground?
You symbol of eternity
What’s her name and does she miss you?
Tell me about your history
Careful I hold you in my hand. A+
Watching how the light is breaking
And I put you on my finger
It felt so strange to feel you there
Cause somehow I felt much better
A spark of hope inside of me
Could it be that someone somewhere?
Because of true love, could it be?
Symbol of endless love B
Friendship and infinity
Symbol of endless love
Two souls united
In everlasting poetry
But be careful with this gift C
Think twice to whom you give this special thing
Yes be careful with this gift
Sometimes empty eyes are only stiffing
At a diamond shining ring
While I have been walking around. A*
I found a little special thing
And my thoughts started to fly high
-and my heart was beating faster-
Thinking about this silver ring
©️by Ian P./ •08.08.07-reworked: 21.10.24/for: VALENTINE+B and fpeee…
Written on a bus on my way back from Europa capital Brussels.
Feel free to give fb and comments
And with those songs volume 4 of my songbooks is fulfilled! No. 5 is already waiting for input.
Ring
While I have been walking around. A‘
I found a little special thing
And my thoughts started to fly high
Thinking about this silver ring
Who has lost you on the wet ground?
You symbol of eternity
What’s her name and does she miss you?
Tell me about your history
Careful I hold you in my hand. A+
Watching how the light is breaking
And I put you on my finger
It felt so strange to feel you there
Cause somehow I felt much better
A spark of hope inside of me
Could it be that someone somewhere?
Because of true love, could it be?
Symbol of endless love B
Friendship and infinity
Symbol of endless love
Two souls united
In everlasting poetry
But be careful with this gift C
Think twice to whom you give this special thing
Yes be careful with this gift
Sometimes empty eyes are only stiffing
At a diamond shining ring
While I have been walking around. A*
I found a little special thing
And my thoughts started to fly high
-and my heart was beating faster-
Thinking about this silver ring
©️by Ian P./ •08.08.07-reworked: 21.10.24/for: VALENTINE+B and fpeee…
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Comments
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Lovely story built around the simplicity of finding a ring.
Very clever indeed.
Nice structure to the song which had a good flow.
Well done and thanks for posting
Sid
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I think this one comes off particularly well RK.
I like how relationships are talked about indirectly through the ring.
And if flows really nicely.
In part C you might consider:
Sometimes empty eyes are only staring
At a shiny diamond ring
I think "shiny" has a more superficial feel than shining. Also it looked like "stiffing' was a typo.
Very nice indeed.
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Oh!!!I loooove the lyrics!!! They have a so wonderful cadence!!!! Wonderful story giving life to a ring. Muy bonito. @RainbowKeeper
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Thank you very much guys!
And @Owen you might be right. 😅0
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