I want that from you
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I want that from you
Verse
I learned something about you yesterday
That has me thinking.
You might be someone worth dating longer.
Be worth me keeping.
Pre chorus
You were out playing ball
With the neighborhood kids.
Laughing having fun.
The way that my dad did.
Chorus
It changes the way I see you.
I see my dad in you.
I see how he loves momma
And I want that from you.
Verse
You show kindness when its unexpected
That has me thinking.
You may be worth me investigating
What else you’re hiding.
Pre chorus
You know my special song.
What brand perfume I wear.
Somethings different with you.
I never doubt you care.
Chorus
It changes the way I see you.
I see my dad in you.
I see how he loves momma
And I want that from you.
Bridge
My mom is the happiest woman
That I’ve ever seen.
She days find a man who’s like your dad.
You’ll find what love means.
Tag
I see how he loves momma
And I want that from you.
Comments
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are the lyrics AI written?
i would say possibly not as the lines don't really work, it feels like the second part of the lines ends too soon, it could be the music isn't the right tempo but i think its the lyrics, i'd be tempted to make the second part of the lines a little longer so it fits the music or change up the tempo just a little.
i.e.
I learned something about you yesterday
That's gone and got me thinking.
You might be someone worth dating longer.
Be well worth my time keeping.
it would keep the flow rather than have a short 2nd line and a long pause, your lines might work with a slow tempo but with the faster one you have it feels like something should be there.
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Interesting0
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I like this feels like it's got real potential . I speeded it up a bit in places, tried to give It a bit more rhythm. Hope that's ok .
It changed the way I see you.
I see my dad in you.
I see how, he loves my momma
And I want , that from you. ( oh yeah, oh yeah)
I learned something about you , yesterday
That is pause for thought
You might be worth dating longer.
Be one for me to keep
You were out playing ball
With the neighborhood kids.
Laughing , joking -having fun.
The way that my dad- did.
You know my special song
The perfume that I wear.
Something feels different with you.
I never doubt you care.
My mom, is the happiest woman
That I’ve ever seen.
You find a man who’s like my dad.
You find what love, really means.
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Came late to the party! Song's been pulled from SoundCloud, so can't comment on whether verse structure worked or not. Guess it didn't.
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