Sidewalk Dancin
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You were so unapproachable
My approach was uncoachable
Yet somehow we'd hit it off
And it Still makes me smile
When the world got the most of us
Your feet spoke for the both of us
On the lawn of your daddy's house
Id watch you beguile
Sidewalk dancin
Sidewalk dancin in the summer romancin
Sidewalk dancin
Sidewalk dancin in the summer romancin
Great to see you're still doin it
Aint no goon that could ruin it
When the felines convene online
Try to gaslight your groove
When the pressures of workin life
Try to mess with your twerkin life
Every night till the day you die
You break out the moves
I remember...
Sidewalk dancin
Sidewalk dancin n the summer romancin
Sidewalk dancin
Sidewalk dancin in the summer romancin
And I'm still your greatest fan
Call me up
and I'll be your man
You can cash in my advice
Don't think twice... Keep on
Sidewalk dancin
Sidewalk dancin in the summer romancin
Sidewalk dancin
Sidewalk dancin in the summer romancin
Comments
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I'm gonna start soundin' like a broken record soon and I really don't mean to.
The music and the chorus go great together and there's a really good vibe with that
I honestly can't say the same for the verses, again to me, it doesn't marry up.
I know how difficult it is to get out of Ai what you hear in your head.
Once more wait for more qualified feedback before replying, I'm quite o.k. with being completely wrong on this!
Sid
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Hey sid, I disagree with you on this one. I think it all locks in well.
Only thing I can think of your not used to hearing cerebral lyrics in a dance beat
Maybe in that sense, I can see it, but I also don't want to be like every thing else.
As always appreciate your ears ..
I love the feedback, as long as it's consistent with all reviews .0 -
"I love the feedback, as long as it's consistent with all reviews"
Let me reassure you, it is an issue you will no longer need to concern yourself with
Sid .
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Which proves your intentions here.
Subtle trolling is still trolling.0 -
Love the playfulness of the lyrics and the phrase sidewalk dancing - euphonius.
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Thanks @RCJames. I try to get good sounding words and use rhyme to help that. To me it's another part of the mix.
Writing to the hook is important too.
Thanks for noticing and commenting!0 -
Wow! Love the bass intro! How cool is that? And the whole groove of the song is really a strength.
Like the unapproachable / uncoachable rhyme. It really sets a lighter tone for the song.
I also like the overall rhyming scheme, with rhymes on the 1st two lines, then the last line rhyming across verses. Repetition with variation is what it is all about.
Not sure about "Daddy's House". Could be a personal reaction, but makes her feel too young to me. Maybe "family's house"?
Cool, easy to remember chorus. Pure pop.
"twerkin life"!! What a phrase! Funny.
Good track! Enjoyed that. Nicely done.
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Thanks, rdm, that's a good point about Daddy's house. But the story does take place when they are 15 maybe.
Daddy may make them seem even younger. Might change that
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