Take Me To Heaven

Hello there. Looking for any suggestions to make this song better. I feel it falls flat, pre-chorus chords/melody and lyrically, unsure if the chorus gets the right point across. This person doesn't want to die per say, but just wants a peek preview of what Heaven is truly like as she struggles to be righteous and happy in an unrighteous world. At least that's what the song means to me. Does that even make any sense?

Thanks so much for your helpful feedback, Renee

For a listen ==> https://soundcloud.com/reneelachapelle/take-me-to-heaven

TAKE ME TO HEAVEN

V1

Try as I may to travel the straight and narrow

I can’t seem to eradicate this kink in my arrow

And when I’m havin’ a bad day, slime falls from my lips

They’ve all fallen, Father, I’m all out ‘a chips, and

[Pre-Chorus]

What I wouldn’t do for a hand to hold

Strolling down beautiful streets of gold

Heaven’s a place where nobody gets old

Never find yourself alone out in the cold

[Chorus]

Take me to Heaven

Take me to Heaven, Lord

For just one day, show me the way, show me what I’m missin’

Lord, take me to Heaven

V2

And babe, when I’m in your arms, heaven, as close as it gets

But your arms been around someone else, smell her cigarettes

And goin’ it alone, these days, you can’t afford the rent

And I know you can’t take it with you but my money’s all spent

[Pre-Chorus]

And what I wouldn’t do for a hand to hold

Strolling down beautiful streets of gold

Heaven’s a place where nobody gets old

Never find yourself alone out in the cold

[Chorus]

Take me to Heaven

Take me to Heaven, Lord

For just one day, show me the way, show me what I’m missin’

Lord, take me to Heaven

V3

And I ain’t sayin’ it’s all bad just there’s more bad than good

And when things turn out right there’s always knockin’ on wood

But somehow, I expected more from God’s kingdom here on earth

It’s gonna take more than Noah’s Great Flood for a golden rebirth

[Chorus]

Take me to Heaven

Take me to Heaven, Lord

For just one day, show me the way, show me what I’m missin’

Lord, take me to Heaven

[Bridge]

Wanna hear angels sing for the hope it brings, a place where there’s just one King

Just one righteous King

[Chorus]

Take me to Heaven

Take me to Heaven, Lord

For just one day, show me the way, show me what I’m missin’

Take me to Heaven

Take me to Heaven, Lord

For just one day, show me the way, show me what I’m missin’

[Chorus]

Take me to Heaven

Take me to Heaven, Lord

For just one day, show me the way, show me what I’m missin’

Lord, take me to Heaven..

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