Letter to my daughter

I had originally posted this back in january.

I re-worked it and put it into suno 4.5,

it's a lot better than the original

Words Me; Music Suno 4.5


https://suno.com/s/YZVLigIgiHivVFFz


The bridge and outro are the words in the letter my late sister sent to her daughter


[Verse 1]

Alone, I lay here lost in thought

My mind labored with emotions

Your photo is held to my heart

My only child, my love and devotion


[Chorus]

I’m struggling to write

Never knowing what to say

In words, true feelings

In these, my final days


[Verse 2]

If you are reading this now,

Then my time has come to a close

My struggles are ultimately over

These are the final words I chose


[Bridge]

Please hold these words to heart,

And take them for what they are

And remember, I'll always be close

As you are my bright and shiny star


[Outro]

[Strong, Spoken]

When I die, give what's left of me away

And if you need to cry, use those tears for others

When you need me, put your arms around someone in need

And give them what you need from me.

I want to leave you somethin better than words

Or sounds, Look for me in people I've known or loved

Comments

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside

    @bhengen

    I remember the first post, it hit me hard then and still does now. Very few things take my breath away, this one does.

    It's one of the most beautiful things I've read, words fail me.

    Thank you Bill.

    Sid

  • @sidshovel - Thanks. I still can't comprehend what it took for her to write that.

  • sidshovel
    sidshovel merseyside

    @bhengen The love for life and family comes through strongly, brings tears to your eyes.

  • @sidshovel - the crappy side of life, unfortunately

  • Well that's a sad one . I hope its not true

    Sounds good

  • @ElvisNash - this is true.. my niece showed me the letter that my later sister wrote before she died. The bridge and the outro are the actual words in the letter.

  • Just wow Bill. What a song.

    And what a strong woman your sister must have been.

  • @RainyDayMan . Thanks Owen, really appreciate it. She was. quick wit also. And a prolific writer, unfortunately none of it still exists ...

  • TammyB
    TammyB Texas

    I need a tissue right now. Wow. I wasn't expecting this and need a minute to gather my thoughts.

    My condolences to your niece and loved ones. It is a beautiful sad tribute, and it's amazing how you made it into a song.

    I love songs that bring out emotions, whether, happy, sad, inspirational, etc. This song does it all.

    I know your sister and niece are proud.

    Well done. Awesome!


  • Thanks tammy, my sister was a prolific writer in her own right. so not surprising she would pen this. I really didn't have to do much

  • HummerWisdom
    edited May 25

    @bhengen No words. Just heartfelt and sincere and REAL songs are simply the best tho' they be of death. So sorry for the loss of your sister. May she be resting in peace, a celestial star. And may your sister be listening, now as I am. And how is your sister's daughter doing these days?

    And your sister still exists through your heart, Bill..

    Love the spoken ending..

    Stellar Song!

    Renee 💌

  • @HummerWisdom - Thanks. My niece is ok from last I spoke. The outro are actual words my sister used in her letter to my niece. again, I can't imagine how difficult that had to be for her. Knowing that your time on this planet is nearing its' end and able to pen then eloquently. My sister had a way with words. She was a very prolific writer. Unfortunately, none of what she wrote still exists. She also had a way of saying something derogatory, without you realizing until moments later :).. We were heading down to the beach. I had written a short story. Her response was - you're becoming a wit and is 1/2 there. .took me a good 15 mins to realize she had just called me a 1/2 wit. I started laughing, and she replied OMG, it took you this long :).. Fun times :)

  • @bhengen Bill, always great to share a sweet story. Your sister sounds like she was a wonderful person to hang out with! And you know what they say about only the good......

    R.

  • @HummerWisdom - never a dull moment :)

  • Hardtwistmusic
    Hardtwistmusic Salem, Oregon

    From the sound of it, you not only used version 4.5, but you also utilized the "meta version" feature. This is absolutely head and shoulders above what SUNO was doing four short weeks ago. Your lyric is fantastic also.

  • @Hardtwistmusic - thank for the comment.. did not know about the meta version. option. i just have it set to 4.5 beta pro version.

  • Hardtwistmusic
    Hardtwistmusic Salem, Oregon

    I'm not sure, but I THINK you can set it to "pro version" and also use the Meta feature. I think I accidentally did that once when 'covering' an older song and updating it. Not totally sure of that.

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