Goodbye America
This one is a bit like Sid's "Where eagles fly no more", but was written in parallel rather than being inspired by it. Suno has a gone a bit overboard with the outro, but oh well!
Music: https://soundcloud.com/rainydayman/goodbye-america
Goodbye America
© 2025 Lyrics: Owen Hovenden, Music: Suno AI
Verse 1:
Goodbye America, I watched you fall
Tripped off your pedestal, once you stood tall
Flames of your liberty, flicker and die
Ink on your promises, fades as it dries
Chorus:
Goodbye America, where did you go?
Your compass is spinning now nothing to show
The bold and the brave, lost in a haze
Stars on the boulevard, stripes in a blaze
Verse 2:
Ransom notes written, in red white and blue
Sacred words twisted, to sound something new
The roar of loudspeakers, drowning your voice
Where fame equals power, and money means choice
[Chorus ]
Verse 3:
The hands of the clock, turn backwards in time
Rallying cries echo, from the bible line
The weight of your glory, too heavy to bear
For those you've forgotten, in silent despair
Bridge:
Do you still have the courage to see where you stand
How far you've drifted from where you began
The tired, the poor, the huddled masses yearn
For the beacon you were, for your light to return
[Alt Chorus}
Goodbye America, I watched you fall
Echoes of liberty, I still hear the call
Take up your banner, what once you stood for
Rise up in conscience , from shore to shining shore
Outro: Goodbye America... Goodbye America... I'm watching still
Comments
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The 1% of people who run the world , won't let America burn . Good song Owen , yeah outro is a bit much. Not quite up to V4 standards , the robot voice is a bit synthesized. But even v4 sound that way . Its a sweet tune , without the rhetoric on America falling apart to abruptly in lyrics and offend any one
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Absolutely brilliant piece of work Owen, far better than mine. Sorry for pinchin' a bit of your thunder!
More poetic and instilling much of the values that will resonate with Americans and others alike.
Constructive suggestions:
The bold and the brave, lost in a daze
Your stars have fallen, your stripes ablaze
Rise up in conscience , from mountain to shore
Very powerful piece told with subtle visuals, and a less than subtle betrayal of those who died for those values.
I applaud your need to write to truth.
Sid
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Hope you're right Elvis! At the moment it feels like watching a slow motion train wreck, but we're all on the train!!
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I'm to worried about it, the rich are greedy. They want the wheel to keep turning . it's been a train wreck since 8000 bc , nothing has changed . A slow motion teeter totter
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My favorite lines:
"Ransom notes written, in red, white and blue"
"Where fame equals power, and money means choice"!!
The lyrics were very good and powerful. It hit me in the gut.
My only change would be:
I need more of an emotional tempo. I need to feel losing(goodbye) America.
I need to feel the slow-moving train wreck in the rhythm.
Overall, Great work!
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Great lyrics. what's missing for me, however, is the buried metaphors and abstract message. but to each his own ;). all kidding aside, I like how you can tell a story. I disagree with you and elvis. I don't think the end is that bad, but then I've been known to listen to the same three note pattern played for 5 mins straight :)
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buried metaphors and abstract messages , ha ha ha ha . Outro should have ended on 12 beats . Them robots do that... go on forever
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Nothing has changed in this world , riding highs and lows. Country music is notorious for waving the flag. for the most part they don't cut naysayer songs . I call them CNN songs. if you want a ruined career , cut a naysayer song0
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Well done, Owen, I think anyone, regardless of their political views can appreciate that it's a well written song. A lot of interesting metaphors. The simple musical treatment is a strength, in my opinion. This feels more like folk than country, despite the generic country vocal that Suno has generated.
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Hey RDM. As an American, I felt this. Despite it clearly being from the perspective of people outside the country, many of us here are also seeing the train wreck unfold in real time, so it’s a message that I think you can relate to whether you’re seeing it from afar or up close.
As far as the song itself, it sounds nice. As someone else said, the music itself probably isn’t on the same emotional level as the lyrics, but at the same time, if it’s overwrought, then the lyrics kind of lose their impact. Always difficult to strike that balance melodically. The lyrics themselves are great though, lots of imagery. Sid made an interesting point with changing “lost in a haze” to “lost in a daze”. I think either could work, honestly. Daze to me sounds like we’re reeling and still coming to terms with what’s happening, which is true, with new train wrecks unfolding every day. Haze gives me the feeling of being lost in the wilderness for decades, which some would say we have been for a long time.
All that to say, it’s a great lyric that really makes you think. And that’s what political songs should do, so well done!1 -
@BeatlesFan64 Cheers Tommy! Yes, they were good suggestions, and just looking back, I didn't think thank him for them
@sidshovel Thanks Sid!
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Great lyrics Owen. Very appropriate right now. I can't say too much more, but you know how much I respect your musical ability.
I have to smile because the next song that came up (autoplay) on Soundcloud was my own song 'Ripe Old Age' which was a spoof tune about AI !! Honest, I wasn't going to mention AI again on the forum !!😂
Keep up the good work.😀
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@ChrisPrice Ha! Slightly ironic, but I'm happy for any of your tunes to come up in my playlist, including that one!
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I loved it. Agree or disagree with the message, it was an exceptional lyric driven song with great prosody and kept me engaged front to back. BTW. . . I LOVED the out-tro.
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Thank you! Good to know the outro works, at least for some people! It's much better than an abrupt ending, but a little long for my taste.
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@RainyDayMan Use this, chop the end off to your taste inc variable fade if you want, takes 30 seconds. Use it all the time.
Sid
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Thanks Sid, I'll give it a whirl!
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