Travesty of Love
Greetings: This one sort 'a rocks all be it just 4 chords all the way through. My idea of a love's over song. Backing Track by My Backing Track ==> https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CXxq50Kl1eA&list=PL72IWflLYjn1pXpyMSzeO7zXgM1Owxgr7&index=2
Any suggestions are welcome. Thank you for listening.
TRAVESTY OF LOVE
Ooooh-ooooh, Oooooh-ooooh, Oooooh-ooooh, Oooooh-ooooh
[Intro]
You told me you were leavin’
I told you just go
You told me you don’t love me anymore
I said, I told you, I told you so
[Chorus]
But that’s love
The travesty of love
That’s love
The travesty of love
And you can’t get enough
It’s never enough, oooh-oooh-oooh
V1
You make excuses
I call your bluff
The lies you tell
Are never good enough
You apologize
Off-the-cuff
Expecting a truce
Sex is rough
[Chorus]
But that’s love
The travesty of love
That’s love
The travesty of love
And you can’t get enough
It’s never, never, never enough, oooh-oooh-oooh
V2
Spent all my money
Took all my time
Dreams in the gutter
No small crime
Pick up the pieces
Tread a fine line
The next go around
Try not to be blind
[Chorus]
But that’s love
The travesty of love
That’s love
The travesty of love
And you can’t get enough
It’s never, never, never enough, oooh-oooh-oooh
[Outro]
You told me you were leavin’
I told you, told you just go
You told me you don’t love me anymore
I said, I told you, I told you so
I told you so..
Ooooh-ooooh, Oooooh-ooooh, Oooooh-ooooh, Oooooh-ooooh
© 2025 Renee La Chapelle – All Rights Reserved 🖖
Comments
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@HummerWisdom - catchy chorus. you should have different chords or chord progression in the chorus to make it stand out.
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@bhengen Thank you and agreed.
Renee
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Has a kind of rap feel to the lyrics so your gonna need some kind of bouncy music to carry it.
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@sidshovel hmmm. I'll give it some thought however, I really liked the way this track went along with it as I wrote much of it to the track. Nice to know it can go another way, thanks.
Renee 💌
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I can tell what you're trying to achieve here and I really like it. If I had the time, I'd put together a backing track with as many real instruments as possible and then go for a really gritty vocal and a big guitar solo. I can hear the vocal melody straight away.
Forgive me, I've got too much on just now so I won't volunteer, but there's a great song in the making here.
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@ChrisPrice Thank you for the high compliment. Yeah, I think it needs to be more a power ballad?
Anyway, I appreciate your keen insight and suggestions,
Renee
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I can't wait to hear this one. I'm getting a Gloria Gaynor vibe (I Will Survive).
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I love your intro! It sets up a dynamic tension right from the get go. No mucking about we are into the heart of it!
I like "The travesty of love" that's such an evocative line, but I think you need to explain/justify it next in the chorus. Maybe:
But that’s love
The travesty of love
Promises so much
And you can’t get enough
It’s never, never, never enough, oooh-oooh-oooh
I like the way you are using short lines as well. Gives it a "words don't count much" feeling, almost brutal.
And the outro to bookend it.
This is not rap. It's rock with screeching guitar solos.
I think this is really good Renee. One of your best.
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@RainyDayMan I LOVE what you did with the chorus!! Yes, it gives it full justification!! Will be using it or something like it and thank you, Owen!
Renee 💌
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@RainyDayMan THANK YOU so much!! Used your suggestions for the Chorus; also extended the chorus with a different (much better, in my opinion) backing track, although I miss that Dm vs the Am in this version.
The only thing I lost was the 'bookend' outro you liked because backing track was too short. But on the other hand, added 2 Pre-Choruses which I didn't have before!!
What are your thoughts, Owen? Better?
Thanks a million - You ROCK!!!
Renee 😍
For a listen ==> https://soundcloud.com/reneelachapelle/the-travesty-of-love
Updated Lyric to fit new backing track:
TRAVESTY OF LOVE
[Intro]
You told me you were leavin’
I told you just go
You told me you don’t love me anymore
I said, I told you, I told you so
[Chorus]
But that’s love
The travesty of love
Yeah, that’s love
She promises so much
But that’s love
The travesty of love
And you can’t get enough, ooooh
And it’s never, never enough
V1
You make excuses
I call your bluff
The lies you tell
Are never good enough
You apologize
Off-the-cuff
Expecting a truce
Sex is rough
[Pre-Chorus 1]
Now, I’m packin’ my bags
‘Cuz honey, what’s the use?
Train whistle, she’s callin’ my name
I’m takin’ off, takin’ off the noose, ‘cuz
[Chorus]
That’s love
The travesty of love
Yeah, that’s love
She promises so much
But that’s love
The travesty of love
And you can’t get enough, ooooh
And it’s never, never enough
V2
Spent all my money
Took all my time
Dreams in the gutter
No small crime
Pick up the pieces
Tread a fine line
The next go around
Try not to go blind
[Pre-Chorus 2]
Oh, and if you’re super lucky
Next time, you hit it right
Oh, and if you flunk out again, my friend
Take another roll, another roll ‘a the dice, ‘cuz
[Chorus]
That’s love
The travesty of love
Yeah, that’s love
She promises, promises so much
But that’s love
The travesty of love
And you can’t get enough, oooh-oooh
And it’s never, never, never enough, oooh..
© 2025 Renee La Chapelle – All Rights Reserved
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Good job Renee! Feels like an improvement to me. I like the new chorus, and the pre-choruses too. This line really jumped out at me:
I’m takin’ off, takin’ off the noose
I like how "tak'in off" can mean leaving, as well as being the start of the longer phrase. And "noose" is such as strong image.
I think the new backing track works fine. The mood is the same even if the chord sequence is slightly different.
It would probably benefit from a little change up somewhere along the line, but you can only work with what's in the backing track!
Solid track! 😀
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A catchy tune. I really like everything about Travesty of Love. It's bitter/sweet, love is a dice roll.
Nice song. Keep up the great work!
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Thank you both so much for your honest assessment!
Have a wonderful holiday weekend,
Renee 💌
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